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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
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0 posted 2000-02-03 03:35 AM


I held a dream
in the palm of my hand.
I held it too tight.
It turned into sand.

All I had left
was the sand and the sweat,
that slipped through my fingers,
leaving only regrets.

© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
1 posted 2000-02-03 04:02 AM


You know I think that most of the people here have stood in those shoes
well written ...short and precise

Rex

White Wolf
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Somewhere in the vast wasteland
2 posted 2000-02-03 04:09 AM


How did you know the story of my life?  
Short, sweet and to the point.  Great job.


 "Life's greatest mystery isn't the meaning of life. To love and be loved is the meaning of life. Now how to attain those is the greatest mystery of all."


Denise
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3 posted 2000-02-03 09:39 AM


Short but says it all. I enjoyed this!

Denise

SEA
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with you
4 posted 2000-02-03 09:44 AM


Serenity, this is a really great poem. So many here can relate. By the way, short and to the point works for me! -SEA
spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
5 posted 2000-02-03 09:48 AM


You have done it again.
Great poem Need I say more.

Rich

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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Glen Hope, PA USA
6 posted 2000-02-03 10:23 AM


You have spoken volumes with very few words...nicely done
Drauntz
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Los Angeles California
7 posted 2007-05-17 08:28 PM


this is marvelous, dear SB.

beautiful. truly.


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