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wayoutwalt
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TEXAS (it's all big)


0 posted 02-03-2000 12:35 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for wayoutwalt

A shadow cast from corner house
The angel of death weeping tears
The wrecking ball fell silent then
She breathed the last of eighty years

With the billows of dust she sighed
How could she just remove her ties
Her fate to roam these halls she met
But just a glimpse through angel eyes

Five generations she led them home
For some too late for some too soon
Each one she left behind would say
She was a curse upon their boon

I never thought I lived amongst her
What I saw is what I could know
But my bride to this was foreign
She said it was for surely so

To me this might be circumspect
But my bride is with me today
And if cross-town the angel's weeping
I hope her eyes don't turn this way



[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 02-04-2000).]
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Poet deVine
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1 posted 02-03-2000 08:14 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Walt, this is so sad! Good poem though! I like....  
Denise
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2 posted 02-03-2000 11:17 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

When I was reading this I was filled with all the emotions of loss, the people in my life and then to add more pain, losing the physical places that reminded me of them. I like how your words brought that out! Great poem Walt.......you should definitely post more!!

Denise
Skyfyre
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Sitting in Michael's Lap


3 posted 02-03-2000 11:27 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

A weeping angel -- what a priceless description of death ...

walt, what you lack in quantity and frequency you make up twofold in quality and depth of thought.  Post just as often as you like, and no more -- I have learned to relish the rare pleasure of reading your work.  

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 02-03-2000 11:55 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

WOW!!!
Mike
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5 posted 02-03-2000 12:50 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Never a disapointment Walt.  Well done.
Sally S.
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6 posted 02-03-2000 10:55 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Well now, Walt... I've always loved your replies.  You have "a way with words" ...pretty much has me giggling um... A LOT.  
This, on the other hand, is not at all what I thought it would be.  Darkness mixed with light.  Sadness mixed with love and admiration... (if I interpreted correctly)
I'm not quite sure what to say, other than it's brilliant in it's own way. (sorry 'bout the rhyme...*giggle*)


[This message has been edited by Sally S. (edited 02-03-2000).]
wayoutwalt
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7 posted 02-04-2000 12:04 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

thank you all for yur support it means alot o yuh and dubble yuh (w) i love you all hehe thanky sally till next time when i write about a booger or somethin yuh
Nan
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8 posted 02-04-2000 07:12 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Wherefore I wonder whence wayout walt wends his words from..... You sure there aren't several people in that head??? Which one is you in the picture???

This piece is really good walt... You have a wonderful ability to express emotion... I'm smiling (even though it was a sad poem)..
BSC
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9 posted 02-04-2000 10:16 AM       View Profile for BSC   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BSC

What an image your words created in my mind, the weeping angel watching the dust settle is truly heart wrenching .....
WhtDove
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10 posted 02-04-2000 10:25 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

What can I say to this eh? Sad, though so original in the way you describe it.  Great work!  LOL@ your comment bout buggers!  
wayoutwalt
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11 posted 02-04-2000 10:27 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

thats boogers b o o g e r s dont try to correct me miss dove i know my boogers!
WhtDove
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12 posted 02-04-2000 10:33 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

ROFL!!  Oops, my mistake!  That's right I certainly don't know your b o o g e r s!
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