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lucky
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0 posted 02-02-2000 07:37 PM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for lucky

Well come as I was
in courage by a fiend to be gone this
journey never linking for a weak or so that it cold
get used this way it did too I’m so glad butt sad you there
yet your presents brings such relief to this aura vaginal draft
and purr puss of mist little chapter which was to leaf you
into a piece full come for table ground but if you no
thing like me you be tried of the same mold
contempt or airy voids that sneaks to
glory fly woke gather then tall
ants which draft tick
ally skewers art and graces
such in dived level souls with the
drudge airy of woke..! I can soy tan any
be leaf which is the truth of this fawn ally if own
lye manna festered threw a single palm or many foams
thy music your peach the very mass sagé of finessé
in appear ants and at tit lewd shod be in tart
con trash to ease kind of odor ease
very same will not rest pond
to a poets rule of dumb
which pears to be just act
ally what they lethal ridge ally
cordon wit newt protest or sin sure
as a mark of ally ants in this fare fate of
finessé... so if I woke at it yon enough
will fat make it add mire able odor
I weight for the voids to rule
ball looming nocturne
ally true in neat..?


 

[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 03-02-2000).]
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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 02-02-2000 07:43 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

'Lucky' -
This is certainly presented with a beauty matching it's words.
How very truly lovely.
Plucked a heartstring here, you did.
~*Marge*~


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kaleidoscope
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2 posted 02-02-2000 07:59 PM       View Profile for kaleidoscope   Email kaleidoscope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaleidoscope

This is so sad!  It starts out reminding me of my lonely mother, but in your case, it ends up your lonely father.  I love this poem.
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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3 posted 02-02-2000 10:03 PM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

I love this - it's poignant and haunting, and sheds a new light on the feelings of the aging.  Very deep and sensitive.



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lucky
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4 posted 02-03-2000 02:22 AM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

Oh..! Marge thank you sooo mush. No one really responds to me any more... My prayers go out to you and all of yours for such sweet acknwledgements.

  kaleidoscope... This is so sad! It starts out reminding you of a lonely mother, but in this case, it ends up as our lonely father and your lonely mother.  I love you bubba, and it's good we know God has everything under control.

  RJ. yes it's poignant, but not really meant to be haunting per se, yet I wanted it to send a different message of feelings of the aging, and yes it was meant to be deep and sensitive and of course... I was "lucky" to have found a love in writing you.

Lucky yours:
Pepper
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Very moving Lucky...
Sensitive and very sad...written with true insight....
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6 posted 02-03-2000 09:07 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I enjoyed this... well done!
Echo Rhayne
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7 posted 02-04-2000 02:39 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Beautiful!

 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*

 
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