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Beside a Nameless Stream

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Mike
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0 posted 02-02-2000 01:16 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mike

I find myself in rolling hills,
...as spring is in the air,
Reflecting on a life to be,
...with mate I soon will pair.

A rising sun from out the east,
...spreads forth its warming glow,
As up ahead a slender oak;
...beside a stream doth flow.

I've never been this way before,
...no path to lead the way,
As walk along this nameless stream,
...and greet the coming day.

Beneath oak's limbs, white patch of snow,
...remains of winter past,
Protected by tree's greening boughs,
...within its shadows cast.

I stop to rest beside small oak,
...and gaze in awe around,
At the beauty of the hills;
...feel nature's grace abound.

I know within, the time will come,
...before our final day,
My loving wife, within my arms,
...beneath oak tree will lay.

Reprise:

I walk along a flowing stream,
...so small it has no name,
No footprints in the sand ahead,
...and none from whence I came.

On distant hill the columbine,
...beneath the setting sun,
Many miles I've walked alone,
...soon will my day be done.

Up ahead a speading oak,
...lies just beyond the bend,
With weary legs I seek its shade,
...my journey will then end.

Beneath the boughs of beauteous tree,
...she lies in peaceful sleep,
I placed her there so long ago,
...so God would ever keep.

I made a bed amongst the leaves,
...and lay her gently there,
Held her close in love's embrace,
...last touched her silken hair.

A nameless stream flows down the hill,
...beside majestic tree,
Beneath its boughs we sleep tonight,
...for all eternity.



[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 02-02-2000).]
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Denise
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1 posted 02-02-2000 01:20 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

You are certainly the romantic Mike! Sooooo beautiful!  

Denise
Martie
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2 posted 02-02-2000 01:37 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Oh Mike, I got goose bumps when I read this--the idea is so romantic and I love the time changes --the beginning and end, just wonderful!  
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3 posted 02-02-2000 01:45 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Romantic, well, yes, and so provokingly saddening. Your poetic eloquence in this piece is superb, Mike. The gentle meter lends itself to the tenderness, the nature of life and death, so keenly aware of one another, symbolized here with such grace. It is beauty, personified.

Claire
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4 posted 02-02-2000 06:01 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Receiving these comments from three writers as gifted as you three are is high compliment indeed.
I sincerely thank you.
Marilyn
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5 posted 02-02-2000 07:31 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Oh Tim...you left me speachless. Beautiful. *sigh*
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6 posted 02-02-2000 07:33 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Oh, Mike-

This is just the tenderest love story.
How great the heart that went into this one.
A talent to be envied.
I will certainly be drawn to this one
again and again.

I really liked the symbolism of the
'slender' oak ... then the 'spreading' oak to show the passage of time.

~*Marge*~



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Mike
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7 posted 02-02-2000 10:20 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Thank you so much for your gracious comments Marge and Marilyn.... glad you enjoyed.
Skyfyre
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8 posted 02-02-2000 11:55 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

This was magnificent -- a story subtly and superbly rendered.  True poetry.

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 02-03-2000 02:07 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

A wonderful poem, lyrical, perfect rhythm, it sang as a melodic, romantic lullaby. Very well done, Mike
Liz
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10 posted 02-03-2000 10:17 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Mike...this is both wonderful (in the literary sense) and oh so sad. I sit here both in awe and with tears in my eyes after having read it.

 Have you ever noticed
That the words...
"Goodbye"
"I'm sorry"
"I love you"
Are so easy to pronounce
...Yet so hard to say
~Javan
 
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