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tori
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 520
Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA

0 posted 2000-02-02 09:35 AM


There is a woman in a room
her door wont open any more
The lock is old, the key is lost,
She stay's all to herself
She can not answer if you knock,
For the key is missing to the lock

In days gone by it opened,
with laughter it would swing
Music filled the room with sweetness,
With a sent that flowers bring

Now it stifled with the stench of rot
That eats in to your lungs
Once her face was full of life
Now her head is hung

She sang and danced as silver moonlight
framed her long red hair
Now that hair has turned to white,
Yet no one know's she's there
Up on her door there hangs a sign
for all the world to see

|> "if you give your heart,
don't lock your door
"Never" give your key.
For behind this door
lives a broken heart
locked in for eternity<|



 If with pen in hand I've made you think
I've not wasted one drop of ink
Vlh.
visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm

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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

1 posted 2000-02-02 09:59 AM


This is very sad, Tori,    and well done, of course!
Denise

JennyLee
Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
2 posted 2000-02-02 01:10 PM


While I agree that this is sad...it is a beautiful piece Tori  


She sang and danced as silver moonlight
framed her long red hair
Now that hair has turned to white,
Yet no one know's she's there
Up on her door there hangs a sign
for all the world to see

I loved this passage so much  

Jenny

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
3 posted 2000-02-02 01:20 PM


Tori this was some excellent writing! Though so very sad.  Wow, I could almost smell that rot, cept I chose not too...hehe
Excellent my friend, excellent!

tori
Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520
Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA
4 posted 2000-02-02 05:59 PM


Thanks Denise for the kind words..
You too Jenny!!!
Rebecca I was going to use another word for that smell. but after all the good one's in  the conversation the other night I need to go to confession..lol  

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