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To My Valentine (Acrostically Challenged)

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Christopher
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0 posted 02-01-2000 09:40 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Christopher

To My Valentine

So vivid the dreams which waking belies-
How perfect they seem yet still we deny.

Often the chances are ones we can’t see,
Whisp’ring in voices n’er daring to be.

Mouthing out wishes, hiding from sight,
Ever suspicious of new love’s delight.

However, as always, life knows of no bounds:
Of only the blazes which ever confound.

Working its wonder it captures the soul-
Trapping you under yet making you whole.

Of two it makes one, sep’rate halves combined.
Learning turns fun; laughter’s unconfined.

Old wound’s still aching - my heart carries scars.
Vacant and shaking, I long from afar.

Eager to touch you - I hope you’re the “one.”
Although this is new I beg you not shun.

Grant this single chance, “Yet another,” I know.
Allow me one dance, A last time to show.

If we discover, I am not the fool:
No greater lover, than I loving you.




[This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 02-01-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 C.G. Ward - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 02-01-2000 09:46 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

WOW!! This is beautiful, Christopher! Very well done and an acrostic too!!

Denise


[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 02-01-2000).]
Poet deVine
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2 posted 02-01-2000 09:46 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

This is truly one of your best. You amaze me! A poet with such depth! A writer of prose with such imagination and an artist with such vision! I hope you send this lovely verse to your valentine! She'll melt I'm sure!  
mariee66
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3 posted 02-01-2000 09:48 PM       View Profile for mariee66   Email mariee66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mariee66



That's what your poem is~

Grrr... or should I say purrrr.......
Marie~
Marilyn
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4 posted 02-01-2000 09:54 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Well done. Challange met and exceeded! I wish I had you talent my friend.  
Nicole
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5 posted 02-01-2000 10:03 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

Awwww!  Such a sweet poem, m'friend!  I agree with PdV, you should definately give this to your Valentine..your heart shines through in your words!

Superbulous!  

 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown
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6 posted 02-01-2000 10:07 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Excellent words....great presentation  
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7 posted 02-01-2000 10:09 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

That's our CHRISTOPHER
Forward and Backward


Calling his love
Happily in verse
Rewarding us all
In his words
Stupendously heading
Toward an
Outside
Promise
Having
Entered
Readily

Really now
Everyone
How
Purely he
Offers
That heart
Staying just
Inside
Running his
Heart through our poet's
Circle



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

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8 posted 02-01-2000 11:00 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Christopher you awe us once again with your talents.  Very well done, and it's nice to see you posting!
Dusk Treader
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9 posted 02-01-2000 11:59 PM       View Profile for Dusk Treader   Email Dusk Treader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dusk Treader

Ah, so beautiful!  You definetly have a silver tongue!  Much enjoyed  

 In flames I shall not be consumed, but reborn. -- Abrahm Simons

Sally S.
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10 posted 02-02-2000 12:05 AM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Yikes!!!  You work sooooo hard!!  This is greeeeeat!

Now, don't you go challenging me to another acrostic sestina.  I'd have to do a "My Bloody Valentine" version on ya!  LOL

Yikes, again!!  
devina
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11 posted 02-02-2000 01:43 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

You've presented yourself well m'friend...so there IS a soft spot under that cute face of yours huh??? Somehow I thought there would be!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
JennyLee
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12 posted 02-02-2000 09:18 AM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

Excellent as always Chick-a-dee  
This is beautiful!

Jenny
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APPLAUDING wonderful acrostic my friend  
JennyLee
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Working its wonder it captures the soul-
Trapping you under yet making you whole.

Excellent as always Christopher  
These are my favorite lines  \

Jenny
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15 posted 02-02-2000 01:49 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

A tenderly written Valentine poem, and not at all challenged, in my not-so-humble opinion.  

However, should you be interested in magnifying the effect of the acrostic, I would suggest removing the spacing between the couplets.     Easier to read that way, and 'twould not detract from the form at all.

As far as the meter -- it isn't PERFECT, which is good, cause then you would be putting me to sleep.  I think it has just enough variety to make things interesting.

--Me


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

Isis
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Wonderful job as always, you never cease to amaze me Christopher!!  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)


Martie
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17 posted 02-02-2000 06:04 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Super job with this Christopher.  Bravo!
Andrew Scott
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Well done Sir Christopher... spoken like a true romantic. I bow to you and yours.
Christopher
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Denise- Wow!!   Thank you!!!

Sharon- Make me blush yet again!!!

Marie- "Purrr" works just fine!!!

Marilyn- Whatcha' talkin' 'bout? You have all my talent and more!!!

Satiate- Find me one, and I'll give it to her!!!

Balladeer-   Thanks kind sir!

Marge- Geez! Whatcha tryin to say? That I'm inside out??? LOL, thank you!!!

Becca- You awe me with your replies!!!

Abe- Welcome again, thank you again!

Sally- Ok, so where is it? I'm expecting another acrostic sestina, with the title "My Bloody Valentine!"  

Devina- My mom says that she didn't drop me on purpose! Says the doc said the soft spot would hardly be noticable by the time I was thirty!!!  

Jenny-   Smiles and clucks!!!

Ruth- Applause heard loudly!!! Thank you mistress of the verse!

Kess- Interesting...hmmm...BE QUIET!!! No, of course I'm kidding! Thank you for the advice m'lady. Taken to heart!!!

Isis- May I never cease m'friend!

Martie- And a super reply!!!

Andrew- Takes one to know one, the bow is returned!
Echo Rhayne
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20 posted 02-04-2000 01:46 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Christopher, Christopher, Christopher......Truly beautiful!  I too applaud your works my friend!  I am going to miss your wonderful poems while I am away.  Take care of yourself!

 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*

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This is wonderful!!!!
Well Written....and very beautiful!


Alina Le Ann
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22 posted 02-05-2000 11:10 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Lucky lucky lady... )

Valentines just around the corner...and I feel the pressure...What to write?  What to write?   )
Gemini
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23 posted 02-06-2000 12:27 AM       View Profile for Gemini   Email Gemini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gemini

Christopher, you have a way with words, this was beautiful.
Christopher
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Echo- Will miss you too! Take care!!

Alina- Thank yo for reading and the nice comments!

Breathe- What lady??? (confused look)

Gemini- No, words have a way with me!!!  
 
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