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Zelda
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0 posted 2000-02-01 07:25 PM



Loneliness,
A grey figure shrouded in an endless black robe,
Carrying the aroma of bad memories and tears.
It's voice is silent- so very eery,
I am made to feel alone in the world-
A soul survivor wandering scared.

       (FYI- I'm not lonely!   )


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Me2
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since 2000-01-29
Posts 25
Escondido, CA USA
1 posted 2000-02-01 07:32 PM


Very Nice, Zelda!  I can feel the dark ... is there going to be more to this story?  For my sake, don't stop here!

thanks!
Paul

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2000-02-01 07:40 PM


Zelda,
Well done enjoyed the read.

Lorelei54
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3 posted 2000-02-01 07:49 PM


arrgghhhh, lil lassie - ye be not lonely, hey???  Incidently, this poem left me hanging, and I suspect other people, too!  NO FAIR!

Welcome to the Forums.  I know you will find many friends in here are truly terrific people.

Denise
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4 posted 2000-02-01 08:00 PM


Welcome to Passions, Zelda! This sure sounds like lonely to me!! Please check your email for a special welcome!

Denise

Zelda
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5 posted 2000-02-01 08:39 PM


Ahh... I promise I will finish this!!

Had to cut it short... dogs were whining to "go"!!  Told you I wasn't lonely  

So, look for more later.. I'm thinking I'll call it Wandering....

Z

Gene
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since 2000-01-23
Posts 935
Colorado, USA
6 posted 2000-02-01 08:56 PM


Welcome, Zelda.

Very nice start. I'm anxious to see where you go with this.

BTW, you don't have to be dark and lonely to write about it.

~Gene  

SEA
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with you
7 posted 2000-02-01 09:49 PM


Zelda, Welcome! I also felt like there was more to this..... will look for it!   -SEA
mariee66
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since 2000-01-30
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8 posted 2000-02-01 10:05 PM


Girlfriend~

Like it so far~

Should have made the guys wait!~

Marie~

Sally S.
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 847
Ohio
9 posted 2000-02-02 12:16 PM


Welcome, Zelda...I hope you find a home here.  It's a wonderful place.

Now, about the ending...... hehehe  

fc
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since 2000-01-18
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10 posted 2000-02-02 09:38 AM


just had to welcome you, nice poem, nice name, lol, I used to be addicted to the nintendo game Zelda....had to quit cold turkey to get away from it lolol...
Zelda
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since 2000-02-01
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11 posted 2000-02-08 12:33 PM


Well, now that my essays are finished, I can thank....
u_gene-  
SEA- Almost finished with it  
Marie- I see you everyday    
Sally S- Thanks for the welcome... happy ending?  
fc- I still am addicted to that game... LOL!

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