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This Explosion of Energy that Waits

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Martie
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This Explosion of Energy that Waits

strong  bastion
this fortress
where raging
disables

fragile chamber
this sigh
is creeping breath
that withers
screams in measure

listen for footsteps
in the sleep of this dream
that drags to danger

find me
lost in this ambivalence

look in the disturbance
of air that trembles

I know this hesitation
and cannot wait for decisions
that take my lifetime

the signal is changing
and the roar will be mighty
this explosion of energy
that waits

It will cast away this day
with determination
and will start again
and grace another
dancing  singing  open

and you won’t even know why




[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 02-02-2000).]
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1 posted 02-01-2000 06:29 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Bravo!
Wonderful word usage here Martie!!!  
Like this twist you present us, had me wondering and thinking... two HIGH compliments!!!
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Hey Martie:  I'm left wondering what is your own perception of this piece, because I'm having a tough time wrapping my mind around this one.  I feel there is something there but can't quite put my fingure on it. Peace to you.  
Martie
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Christopher--hey thanks for the Bravo.

Scott--I know...confusion in this one, huh?...it is about anger in a peaceful person. It is about wanting to change something and the fear of changing. Does that help?

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 02-01-2000).]
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4 posted 02-01-2000 07:44 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Martie,
This poem speakes oodles, I enjoyed the read. *L*
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5 posted 02-01-2000 07:51 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I can always 'feel' your words, Martie!! I'm sure that's a sign of a great writer!!  

Denise
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My thoughts ran in the direction of a person under the dominance of another... discovering the courage to act-out against their oppressor and finally breaking out to freedom.  Divorce from an abusive spouse who won't even understand the reasons why they have been left.  Yes / No?  Well… that's my take.  Thumbs and Toes to you.
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Martie, At first I thought the same as Andrew until I read your explanation and yes, you put your finger on it (I know from experience) and have the feeling that perhaps you do too. Otherwise how could you have known?
Liz
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Martie-
This is a little different for you.
A part of me understands it ...
I've been there too.
Wanting all around me to feel the calm,
while I wait out the storm within.
Unsure if the lightning is worth
releasing.
Afraid of the ensuing thunder's roar.
~*Marge*~




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I tried to read this one slowly....and I can't. The words insist on racing through my mind at breakneck pace. Terrific work.
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Even the male of the species is capable similar feelings, but maybe not able to so eloquently express them.  
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Sy--Thanks for seeing oodles.

Denise-Feeling is the sign of a great reader.

Scott--A person in this situation might feel the same, but thankfully this wasn't the case for me.  Thanks for all your thought on this poem.

Liz--Some things you just can't write about unless you experience them.  I know you understand.

Marge--your insight is amazing.  I was trying to write from raw emotion, without the pretty.  Thanks for understanding

Balladeer--fast or slow, I'm just happy when you read my words and comment.  Thank you.

Mike--a human condition, alas, and you are a sensative guy.  Thank you for your reply.
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communication - is the key to success-
but venting is essential to life
beautiful write Martie
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