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tracie66
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0 posted 2000-01-31 07:37 PM


You're everywhere

You're all of my world, everything that I can see

You fill my world with happiness and you've come and set me free

You're the moon that I see shining brightly upon your face

You're the stars that dance lightly as we softly embrace

You're the gentle night air breeze, gently brushing upon my knee's

You're the sweet smells in the air, flowing through my hair

And you're all around me and I thankyou for being there



[This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 02-01-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Tracie Maree Collis - All Rights Reserved
jfreak
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1 posted 2000-01-31 08:26 PM


Whomever this is, is truly the center of your universe.  This is just so sweet.  Very well done.  Keep up the good work.

Jfreak

Denise
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2 posted 2000-01-31 10:35 PM


Sweet and lovely, I agree!

Denise

mariee66
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3 posted 2000-02-01 01:15 AM


Simply dreamy~

Very nice!

Marie~


 "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind;
And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard

Christopher
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4 posted 2000-02-01 01:24 AM


Like the sentiments, but could I suggest a minor grammatical change... "Your" should be "You're" As in YOU ARE...
tracie66
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5 posted 2000-02-01 06:23 PM


Many thanks to jfreak, Denise mariee and a special thanks to Christopher for spotting my error Ta....    Chris I'll edit it straight away..
SEA
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6 posted 2000-02-01 10:01 PM


Tracie, this was very, very sweet!   -SEA
tracie66
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7 posted 2000-02-02 08:18 PM


Sea..thanks for your sweet reply and thanks for reading...Tracie    
hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 2000-02-03 09:48 AM


Sounds like love to me Tracie  
tracie66
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9 posted 2000-02-03 07:44 PM


Dear Hoot
Yes my loving husband who saved me from my past torture and has held my hand all the way since....14 years in fact. Thanks for reading  

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