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Saxoness
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0 posted 2000-01-31 01:52 AM



        
        Sometimes at night
        while
        you're asleep
        I lie awake and think of
        you.
        I remember the nights when
        my door would open
        and silently you
        would sneak in to pull my legs
        out straight
        and when you would go
        I'd tuck them back.
        Or how my covers you
        would adjust
        so I wouldn't get
        tangled
        and when you would go
        I twisted them up
        again.

        I remember you coming
        in
        to look at me to kiss
        my cheek
        or my arm.
        And say....
        I love you.
        I never stirred...
        for those moments were like
        teardrops turning into
        diamonds...
        too precious
        to disturb.

        Sometimes at night
        while
        you're asleep
        I lie awake and imagine
        that you are
        here
        watching over me
        and then you say
        I love you.
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 "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."
                                      
                                 -Charles Brugnot



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Rex Allen McCoy
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1 posted 2000-01-31 02:29 AM


Well ... you just made me go and check
on my daughter.
One doesn't realize the importance of what
may seem just trivial to us.
Thankyou

Rex

mariee66
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2 posted 2000-01-31 02:35 AM


WOW!

Makes me wish I had a father who did that for me...

Your poem was beautiful~

Marie~

childomine
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3 posted 2000-01-31 07:38 AM


I'm with Marie - very beautiful & touching poem.  I too would have loved a father such as you describe!
Saxoness
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4 posted 2000-01-31 08:27 AM


Thank you all for the replies!

Rex, I have no doubt that your daughter will remember moments like those for the rest of her life.

mariee and childomine, I am indeed fortunate to have him as my Dad. He isnt really good at expressing his emotions...but in his own way, he tells me how much he loves me. I will always hold that dear to m heart.


 "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot


dovesongs
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5 posted 2000-01-31 10:59 AM


Very touching.  Further proof that the smallest things we do for others can have the most lasting, profound effect.  You said it beautifully here.  Lucky you to have a father like that.
Denise
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6 posted 2000-01-31 01:31 PM


This is so sweet, Saxoness! He sure sounds like a great Dad!  

Denise

RainbowGirl
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7 posted 2000-01-31 01:42 PM


Angel: Bless....

"teardrops turning into
diamonds...
too precious
to disturb."

HUGS


 Memories give you the power to collect roses in the winter...

Saxoness
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8 posted 2000-01-31 02:37 PM


Thank you! These are the sorts of things I treasure to me when I'm all alone...the things that carry me through each day.

 "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot


LngJhnAg
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9 posted 2000-01-31 02:50 PM


lil Ness - this is a very sweet tribute to your father.  You are fortunate because you know how lucky you are.
Balladeer
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10 posted 2000-01-31 04:36 PM


Saxoness, you return in fine style. This piece is incredibly touching and sweet. You portray those special moments perfectly.
Saxoness
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11 posted 2000-01-31 05:00 PM


Thank you!

LngJhnAg, Thank you. I am indeed lucky...more than I'll ever know.

Balladeer, you're words of praise mean much to me. There is no perfect poem, however, and the little touch of human flawedness is what truly makes them great.


 "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot


Munda
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12 posted 2000-01-31 09:19 PM


Saxoness, this is a beautiful poem. It made me feel the love of a father, something I never knew. Thank you for that.  
Marge Tindal
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13 posted 2000-01-31 09:43 PM


Saxoness-
What tender moments you've portrayed here.
If they only realized how well we remember the little things.

I hope my children have these kind of memories of my nightly vigil when they someday hover over their own children.

Thanks for sharing this.
~*Marge*~


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Alina Le Ann
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14 posted 2000-01-31 10:14 PM


Saxoness,
I'm a daddy's girl and this poem definately describes the thoughts and feelings that go through a mind at the most precious times!

Well done!

Alina

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15 posted 2000-01-31 10:34 PM


This truely drips of sweetness  
Alicat
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16 posted 2000-02-01 12:12 PM


Saxoness, I'm very glad you overcame your writing slump just enough to pen this poem.  And thank you for posting it.  


Alicat


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Watching modem lights a-blinking
Churning out poetic hash.
Lord, in all Your piety,
Help me keep my sanity:
Please don't let the modem crash! --Alicat


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17 posted 2000-02-01 12:31 PM


Sax, this is such a great poem, I'm going to save it so I can read it again and agian to remind me of my own father.  I never knew how much I would treasure those moments, until my parents got a divorce.  Thank you.
And you will never be alone.  For as long as your heart is beating, I will be at your side.  And then when our hearts are no longer beating, I will meet you in heaven, and smile.  Because you were the one who reminded me of the precious moments.  You are never alone when you have touched so many lives.  I will smile myself to sleep tonight.  God Bless, and have streangth

The Haunted Poet
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18 posted 2000-02-01 12:39 PM


This poem is a rare one! It has made me actually stop to think about my own father whom I am having troubles with at the time. This poem will surely touch anybody's heart who reads it!
Beri
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19 posted 2000-02-01 04:21 AM


Saxoness -- I am just going to repeat what has already been said but I feel I must -- this is a sweet and beautiful poem -- May love such as this always be with you.  Through reading this, you actually were able to make me also feel the true love of a father -- something I have never really known.  You made me stop and think.  Thank you for that!  

 If you love something, set it free, if it comes back to you, its meant to be...


JamesMichael
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20 posted 2000-02-01 05:33 AM


There's nothing as valuable as a loving parent.  "teardrops turning into diamonds" such lovely moments.   James
Saxoness
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21 posted 2000-02-01 10:49 AM


WOW!!!
I tell you, I never in a million years expected this poem to get sooo many replies. I'm truly grateful to you all, and I am so glad that my poem could touch you in some small way.
I gave this poem to my Dad in an E-card. I live in Missouri and he lives in Texas, and it is very hard on me and my family to be so far apart. My mother told me on the phone that she could hear him crying after he read it. When I talked to him he told me he had just been expecting some bland little hello, not to be rocked to his very core. He said he never knew that I was awake during those times. I told him, I always knew. Always.


 "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot


Nan
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22 posted 2000-02-02 07:08 PM


Yeah, well - Here's one more, Angela.... This is a great poem - I hope you've shared it with your dad - I think you should print it out and frame it for him for Father's Day... It's perfect....
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