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Once Upon A Dream
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0 posted 01-30-2000 10:11 PM       View Profile for Once Upon A Dream   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Once Upon A Dream

A love kept within
With nowhere to go
Has discovered a place
And declared it its home

An untapped spring
Resembles this love
Flowing in secret
As free as a dove

Nobody compares
Such a beautiful soul
Your eyes like diamonds
Your heart like gold

Never have my lips
Felt a touch as true
So completely lost
Am I, in you

I was swept away
At my first sight
You were like an angel
Shrouded in light

An assurance was made
We sealed it with a kiss
My adoration remains unyielding
I promise you this

OnceUponADream

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SEA
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with you


1 posted 01-30-2000 10:16 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Once Upon A Dream....... this reminds me of my wedding day. So very romantic.....Welcome to Passions! Great way to start, I'll be looking for more from you!  -SEA
Poet deVine
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2 posted 01-30-2000 10:19 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Welcome to Passions! I think this is a wonderful, loving poem!
Alwye
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In the space between moments


3 posted 01-30-2000 10:22 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Yes, welcome!  This is incredibly beautiful..you have a lot of talent!  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha

jaxjoy
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4 posted 01-30-2000 10:33 PM       View Profile for jaxjoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jaxjoy

Beautiful and heartfelt..I enjoyed this very much  
Lynn
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5 posted 01-30-2000 10:41 PM       View Profile for Lynn   Email Lynn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynn

Welcome to Passions....Great intrance...I really like the poem.

 If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~
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6 posted 01-30-2000 11:14 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Welcome to Passions, Once Upon A Dream! Beautiful poem! Simply beautiful! Please check your email for a special welcome!

Denise
mariee66
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7 posted 01-31-2000 12:04 AM       View Profile for mariee66   Email mariee66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mariee66

WOW~

That cetainly was dreamy~

You have quite a talent~

Marie~
The Haunted Poet
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8 posted 01-31-2000 12:09 AM       View Profile for The Haunted Poet   Email The Haunted Poet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for The Haunted Poet

Excellent Poem!!! I really liked it! Welcome and keep at it!
Marge Tindal
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9 posted 01-31-2000 12:34 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Once-
This is a very pretty poem.
Reading it in a whisper worked for me.
I like it ~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
       noles1@totcon.com         



[This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 01-31-2000).]
One Who Understands
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10 posted 01-31-2000 12:59 AM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

God thats beautiful.  It makes me wish I were a girl   Welcome, I can't wait to hear from you again. You write very well
Once Upon A Dream
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11 posted 01-31-2000 08:02 PM       View Profile for Once Upon A Dream   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Once Upon A Dream

One time before I was a member of this wonderful forum.  I went under the name of 'Keeper of the Keys', if any of you remember.  I have to admit that I never got as many replies to my writings then as I did on this very first one today.  Thank you all so incredibly much.  I love you all!  

 God, grant me the serenity to accept the things I can not change, the courage to change the things I can, and the wisdom to know the difference.

~~~OnceUponADream~~~
tulip
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12 posted 01-31-2000 08:24 PM       View Profile for tulip   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for tulip

This was very beautiful.  The other person is very lucky!!!
Gene
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13 posted 01-31-2000 09:52 PM       View Profile for Gene   Email Gene   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Gene's Home Page   View IP for Gene

Beautiful poem.   Execllent way to start off. I like how your name fits so well with the poem--they're almost inseparable.

Welcome, Once (or twice--hopefully many more visits), to the forums.    

~Gene
hoot_owl_rn
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14 posted 02-01-2000 08:55 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I must have really liked this...I replied twice ....oops

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hoot_owl_rn
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This is beautifully romantic...welcome to passions once more.
I'd only make to very small changes in the first and third stanza to just perfect the rhyme...I was going to e-mail them to you, but since you've no e-mail listed...Just a suggestion here:

A love kept within
(With nowhere to roam)
Has discovered a place
And declared it its home

Nobody compares
(Such a beauty to hold)
Your eyes like diamonds
Your heart like gold


Koon
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16 posted 02-01-2000 09:27 AM       View Profile for Koon   Email Koon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Koon

Beautiful entry! I like it a lot!

 Koon-
Once Upon A Dream
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17 posted 02-01-2000 07:41 PM       View Profile for Once Upon A Dream   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Once Upon A Dream

thank you for the wonderful suggestions owl!  thank you all so much

 God, grant me the serenity to accept the things I can not change, the courage to change the things I can, and the wisdom to know the difference.

~~~OnceUponADream~~~
 
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