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Dark Angel
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0 posted 01-30-2000 06:53 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dark Angel

Crushed!!!


Crushed is my fragile soul
Burned by your selfish heart
Chained to your iron goal
Lost is this poet's art

Blood boiling, circulation
Over flowing, spilling and
Producing drunken relation
Heaving the emotional stand

I am but loved, for what I do
But not, for whom I am
My heart must be hated too
By a computerised robotic man

Sadness always envelope's me
As I walk through memory lane
I feel guilty cause I'm angry
So life, will remain the same


Dark Angel.



 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


© Copyright 2000 Dark Angel - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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1 posted 01-30-2000 06:59 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

This is such a powerful poem..full of pain and anger and resignation....very nicely done, DA....  
Denise
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2 posted 01-30-2000 07:02 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is excellent, I agree!! Well done, DA!!

Denise
WhtDove
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DA I'm sorry your hurtin like this girl!  I can sure feel the pain and anger flowing off this one!  Big hugs to ya Hon!!!!!
Moonshine
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4 posted 01-31-2000 03:35 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

Aw DA (((((((great big huggs hon))))))) Remember I am here for you whenever OK.......
Elizabeth Santos
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5 posted 01-31-2000 04:29 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Yes, we do feel anger at times when we lose a love, and not just sorrow, I had forgotten.
I loved your poem
Liz
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6 posted 02-01-2000 12:57 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Add my name to the list DA. . .

We do feel anger when we lose a love. . . you have captured that feeling well. . . I'm here if you need to talk. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

LngJhnAg
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Darkman - yanno, first it was the women who were down in the dumps - and now you, too?  For a minute there I was hoping you were Toerag because of all this rejection and down-in-the-dumps stuff.  The poem is well written.  Now, pull yourself out of this dive, Man!
Gene
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8 posted 02-01-2000 01:46 PM       View Profile for Gene   Email Gene   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Gene's Home Page   View IP for Gene

There's nothing wrong with feeling down--what are emotions for?  It's only when you can't express it that it becomes a problem.

Dark Angel, you did a fine job of expressing it in this poem, and it will not fall on deaf ears.

~Gene
Gemini
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9 posted 02-01-2000 02:22 PM       View Profile for Gemini   Email Gemini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gemini

Thank you for sharing what my heart has also felt.  You expressed it very well.
Meadowmuse
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10 posted 02-01-2000 02:27 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Dark Angel,
It is with sadness that I find myself relating to this message. Your words seem to have been spoken by the voice of experience.  Nicely done, keenly felt.

Claire
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