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Too Painful Is The Waking (RG's Challenge)

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Denise
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Iím standing in the shadow
Created by loveís light
The darkness hides my sorrow
Deep hidden from your sight.

The musicís playing magic
It flows from love's true heart
But lonely grows more tragic
For silence is my part.

Weíre dancing in my dreaming
There Iím the one you love
Itís me you are romancing
Beneath dreamís stars above.

Too painful is the waking
A burden I canít bear
So dreamingís where Iím staying
Enfolded in your care.

Itís there I see a smile
Thatís beaming bright for me
And sings there all the while
Our love was meant to be...

And itís seeing that smile
That makes my life worthwhile.






[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-31-2000).]
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RobertB
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awwww Denise.

Robert
Gene
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"Iím standing in the shadow
Created by loveís light"

Wonderful phrasing. Great way to start. Very beautiful poem.

~Gene
Elizabeth Santos
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Denise, You and Sy are on the same wavelength, both dreamers. (well, I am too)
This is such a romantic dream. Don't let me disturb you
Beautiful
Liz
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Denise,
When it comes to dreaming your no slouch, love the poem. *L* Sy
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Denise-
This is so lovely.  
You've been inspired by the challenge
and certainly rose to meet it.
Wonderful.
~*Marge*~


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Flowing beauty as always...
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Denise: Wow!...This is hauntingly beautiful..

HUGS

 Memories give you the power to collect roses in the winter...
devina
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I think you've hit this one right on the mark!!! Beautiful lines Denise!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Denise
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Robert, Gene, Elizabeth, Seymour, Marge, Mike and Rainbow Girl, thank  you all so much for reading and commenting! I'm glad you liked it!   Thanks to you too, Devina! You snuck in there on me!  

Denise

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Beautiful Denise! You met the challenge with some lyrical phrases!  
Dark Angel
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11 posted 01-30-2000 05:36 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

What a beautiful romantic dream Denise!!
Well Done!  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


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Thanks, PdV! I'm glad you liked it! And you too, Dark Angel! (you snuck in there on me....hehe)  



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Martie
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This is lovely Denise and heart breaking. What say we turn things around and make the dream reality and reality but a dream?
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A most beautiful poem.
Denise
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Thanks Martie and Gemini! Glad you liked it!
Wouldn't that be great Martie, if people could make all their dreams their reality?! I'm sure people would stand in line for that one!!  

Denise
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Denise,  I like it-even when the world does not live up to one's expectations--Anything's possible in our dreams--ah what dreams--another fine poem!!!  David
  A ROSE for you my dear- you 'rose to the challenge!--thanks for bring it to my attention.
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yep know all about living in dreaming, you put it beautifully  
Danny Holloway
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Would like to echo u_gene's comments above.
Danny
Denise
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Thank you David, FC and Danny for reading and commenting! Glad you liked it! Thanks too for the rose, David!

Denise
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Oh Denise, this is so sad and sweet!  Your poetry always touches my heart!


Corinne
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Thanks Corinne! I'm always grateful for your input!  

Denise


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"Weíre dancing in my dreaming"
Absolutely wonderful line as well as the rest of the poem
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Thanks, Ruth! I'm glad you liked it!  
Denise
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You have "wow'd" me~

This is wonderfully, beautifully, thoughtfully written~

Marie~
 
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