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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
In a cold and shallow grave, lays low my fettered soul, Echoes of a distant past, doth Thanatos extol, Above the sword of Damocles, hangs by a tattered thread, Dereft of faith in man and god, I seek the living dead. Departed paths of vulgar sin, I walk in trackless stead, In the canyons of mine fears, I shrink in vengeful dread, Seeking solace deep within, chasms of impertinence, In my lone and stricken soul, lays dim and dark existence. Begone ye screams of silence, harbingers of pain, Cloaked in isolation, you mock in harsh disdain, My soul is torn asunder, I curse you God of Hell, As you pierced my trouble soul, what horrors I befell. You spoke of quiet solitude, to tempt me to your lair, Then lanced me in my troubled heart, to depths of dark despair, Nemesis, I beg of thee, rise up in righteous ire, Protect from Tisiphone, from Hell's eternal fire. With all my voice I scream to you, protect me from the night, Alas, in forlorn desperation, I journey to the light, Banished to mind's coventry, I heed the demon's call, Beckoned by the silent screams, I enter Dante's Hall. Drawn into the vortex, I hope and pray to find, Total absolution, illusions of the mind? Drowning in disharmony, upon a tranquil sea, Adrift upon the River Styx, am blind but yet I see. Bowing to Mephistopheles, as Faust I sell my soul, Unto the Fallen Angels, at last I cede control, On bended knee I enter, the world of waking dreams, Final absolution, farewell to silent screams. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 01-30-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike, you have written an inferno here. Your poetry is superb and your intellect captivating. How do you write like that? My meager homespun heart sees a vision of despair. Lost this soul of art to a fire burning Lair? |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Mike, so passionately written. Beautiful, dark, intriguing. Claire |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is wonderful, Mike! Truly captivating read!! Denise |
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Chris Goodman Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 92Issaquah, Washington usa |
Mike, fine effort (lol)! You are a wonderful poet. Thanks for sharing. I wish I was a poet, but I am nothing more than a writer that wants to be a poet. Sincerely, Chris Goodman |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Mike This is an astounding piece of poetry that I missed, and Chris, I know how you feel, when I read something like this , I feel like a poet who has a long way to go to become a poet Liz |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
I really enjoyed this one. Excellent. ~Gene |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thank you all for your very gracious comments. I have been working on this for a long time... reworking and adding... nice to see the effort was worth the time. |
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The Haunted Poet Junior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 37Sumner Washington |
Well Mike I congratulate you on this poem. However I must bring up something. Begone ye screams of silence, harbingers of pain, Cloaked in isolation, you mock in harsh disdain, My soul is torn asunder, I curse you God of Hell, As you pierced my trouble soul, what horrors I befell. You spoke of quiet solitude, to tempt me to your lair, Then lanced me in my troubled heart, to depths of dark despair, Nemesis, I beg of thee, rise up in righteous ire, Protect from Tisiphone, from Hell's eternal fire. With all my voice I scream to you, protect me from the night, Alas, in forlorn desperation, I journey to the light, Banished to mind's coventry, I heed the demon's call, Beckoned by the silent screams, I enter Dante's Hall. I'm afraid to say that I think you have stolen this part from an aurthor named Tim. I am not accusing you of anything it's just that I've read the poem with those passages in it by Tim in Open Poetry #1 I do beleive. Good Poem though! |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
Well, you certainly did a wonderful job with this poem  |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
I truly appreciate the concern Haunted Poet. I sometimes forget that some are not aware that I used to submit under this name. But Mike really isnt that bad of guy (most times). |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
*laughing* How dare you steal lines from yourself Wonderful poem |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Sheesh... where's a prosecutor when you need one? I never did trust that Tim guy anyway... Thanks Hoot... *smile* |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Tim/Mike...Mike/Tim....*spinning in circles*...lol Who ever you may be this is excellent and definately worth the effort you put into it. Hmmm...you know..I have heard tell of a great prosecutor on this board but he is difficult to get to know. (no e-mail addy posted you know...lol) If you are in need of his services I am sure we can contact him some how!  I am in awe of your talent Mike. This is wonderful!! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I heard tell of a prosecutor whose daughter once in Sunday school proudly announced to the class that her father was a persecutor... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Kids are precious, aren't they Mike?! hehehe  Denise |
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