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Nan
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0 posted 2000-01-30 11:07 AM


Vast epochs cast as fossiled specks in time,
Striated tombs interred throughout the world
Lend touchstone sediments to advent's kind.
Thenceforth anon wends evolution's change;
As harbinger, the nascency of life,
Foretold of destinies fulfilled this day.

Lost relics note Paleozoic day.
Emergent firstlings from the womb of time,
Prelusive tenets of all earthly life,
Predate the Great Divides about this world.
Mute artefacts boast evidence of change;
That sapience upstood in rightly kind.

Caved scriveners carved etchings of first kind,
Scribed signatures of juvenescent day.
'Til Cheop's spire spake enigmatic change,
All messengers of pre-recorded time;
Colossal seemed as wonders of the world
Bore witness to the rudiments of life.

In Ancient East rose early factioned life.
Societies of City-States in kind,
Civilizations aimed to rule the world,
Grand Empires fallen remnants of lost day.
A Golden Age quelled Medieval time
And Renaissance of spirit enscribed change.

One metamorphic centenary change,
Transmutant of simplistic way of life.
Extensive progress unsurpassed in time,
Unfounded passage for all humankind.
The precipice of scientific day
Defines existence of a modern world.

Futurity rends visions for our world;
Endurance yet a quest subject to change.
What imminence befalls untrodden day,
As man espies intergalactic life?
A Universe alone 'tis naught mankind;
An Age is but a second lest mistime.

Temporal world yields pendency to life;
Millenniums' change plenary in kind.
Man's day a flicker in senescent time.



[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 01-30-2000).]

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Ted Reynolds
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1 posted 2000-01-30 11:20 AM


Golly, and I have enough trouble making sense of what happened just yesterday . . . and as for writing a meaningful sestina . . .  maybe I should just compliment you on your  vocabulary, and vamoose. In other words, I admire.
Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 2000-01-30 11:42 AM


Nan,
Just what I needed to baffle my mind, an intellectual and eloquent sestina. Sorry, I can't come within a eon of this. So lost in the beauty and meaning, I didn't notice the repetition of ending words, it just flowed so smoothly through time.
I'm in awe
Liz

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2000-01-30 11:46 AM


Nan,
You weave an intricate cacoon.
But is it not the same moon,
The same sun the same tribune.
I would my candy a bitter sweet.
Then packaged in a frame so neat.
But I do admit you are the best.
And have met all and every test.
Your poem is as wonderful as you.
Love ya Sy

Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2000-01-30 11:54 AM


Nan-
Sure makes a phrase such as,
'This is wonderful', seem so mundane.
However, words failing me-
this is wonderful.
Only sent me scurrying to the
dictionary twice.
I enjoyed the adventure.
Whew!  I'd say you've done a
relatively splendiferous job with this.
~*Marge*~


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5 posted 2000-01-30 11:54 AM


Nan: Wow!!!...I had to read this several times and it's a while since I read anything concerning The Paleozoic Era...and I love "Renaissance of spirit enscribed change"..

HUSG

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Gene
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6 posted 2000-01-30 01:03 PM


"Vast epochs cast as fossiled specks in time,
Striated tombs interred throughout the world..."

What a great opening line. )I'm an amature Paleontologist). Loved it.

~Gene

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7 posted 2000-01-30 01:10 PM


Nan, since we're speaking of the Paleozoic era, will you be my Pal?  
Denise
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8 posted 2000-01-30 03:45 PM


This is excellent, Nan!! This was worth the wait!!

Denise

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9 posted 2000-01-30 04:56 PM


Now may I reply Nan ? Please, please, please ? LOL I had a heck of a time translation this , but I think I got it now. ; ) Nan, you do have a vocabulary ! And now that I understand what it is you're talking about....what can I say ? I am in total awe !    
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10 posted 2000-01-31 07:45 AM


Hey, I thought you said there was no "picture of thyme" you could post.... geez...

Very fine poem, m'friend! I'm also envious of your vocabulary.... couldn't even spell "torture" yesterday, remember? Duh.

This kind of work exemplifies the reasons you are the resident poetry teacher! Excellent!

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11 posted 2000-01-31 08:46 AM


Wow Nan. I'll admit, I had to go back and read this twice, and still I could not fathom the talent behind it. Bravo!

P.S--Can you teach me how to write like that?  
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I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."
                                      
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Mike
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12 posted 2000-01-31 11:40 AM


magnifique.
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13 posted 2000-01-31 11:48 AM


"Man's day a flicker"...

For all our pomposity, that sure puts it in perspective, doesn't it? *G* Lovely, Nan!

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14 posted 2000-01-31 12:26 PM


Yes Nan. I'm another in awe here...I loved this piece..   and Marge, I'm impressed...only two trips to the dictionary?!!!


 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon



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15 posted 2000-01-31 08:22 PM


I always read Nan's work with a Dictionary in one hand....good job...  

Nan
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16 posted 2000-02-01 06:23 PM


I really appreciate your taking the time to read and comment on this - all of you - I know it's one of my heavy-hitters, and they sometimes can get a bit... um... overwhelming??...
Reading your positive comments means a great deal to me, my friends......Thanks again


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17 posted 2000-02-01 06:27 PM


"One metamorphic centenary change"

Loved the whole thing('course) but this one grabbed me. It says so much in so little.

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