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Koon
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since 01-27-2000
Posts 45
Singapore


0 posted 01-30-2000 09:45 AM       View Profile for Koon   Email Koon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Koon

The goddesses' guardian,
The charming queen's gown.
The Garden of Eden,
The royal king's crown.

All things beautiful,
All things small,
And yet I feel
I have it all.

My world has never been blue
Since you came along.
I'm in love with you
My now heart sings a song.

Yes, not blue it will be,
As you have the golden key.
The key to unlock my heart,
And with my sorrows, I part.

And now I end my poem,
Without the slightest bit of solemn.
You may think that I'm a fool,
But all I want to say is I love you.


 Koon-
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Buffpimp
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since 01-23-2000
Posts 39


1 posted 01-30-2000 09:51 AM       View Profile for Buffpimp   Email Buffpimp   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Buffpimp

ONCE AGAIN KOON :P
Well as always i was very pleased to read this.  I have only one comment.  Keep your pattern.  Try not to stray from your pattern.  I do it all the time and I get criticized for it tons, so I dont want to see that happen to you.    This work did have great emotional content and great meaning.  Once again, A+
Patrick
Denise
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2 posted 01-30-2000 03:53 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

A beauitful love song, Koon!!  

Denise
Koon
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Singapore


3 posted 01-31-2000 08:48 AM       View Profile for Koon   Email Koon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Koon

Oh my, receiving comments like these really give me the urge to write more but I'm afraid I won't fare as well. I guess I'll have to learn more from you guys first.

 Koon-
Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 01-31-2000 08:53 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

When you write what's in your heart, It's always beautiful, as you have already proven.
This is lovely
Liz
Beri
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5 posted 02-01-2000 04:08 AM       View Profile for Beri   Email Beri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beri

Koon -- I wouldn't worry about learning more...you are already doing wonderfully!  And yes, your style is great too, though I am not one to pay any attention to that -- I just write what I feel however it comes out, even if it has no rhyme or reason, or any style or pattern.  I feel that if you mean it, then its good!  So keep it up!  This was a beautiful poem also!  

 If you love something, set it free, if it comes back to you, its meant to be...

Koon
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6 posted 02-01-2000 09:05 AM       View Profile for Koon   Email Koon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Koon

Thanx for your replies. I have been wrtiting from my heart and will go on doing that. Thanx for the support!

 Koon-
 
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