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I Say His Absence Leaves No Empty Space...
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kaleidoscope Junior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 38 |
I feel a sorrow deep within my soul That burns inside like faint but steady pain; Perhaps I’m broken, never to be whole Until he’s back to stay with us again. - - - Yet no, I see we’ve both changed far too much To ever go back where we were before - I am alive - I laugh, I sing, I touch - I love my life, my freedom more and more. - - - So, strong and glad I pass the aching by And work to raise my children good and sweet; They don’t remember, they’ve no need to cry, Our life together stays full and complete. - - - I say his absence leaves no empty space... I say he’s gone and didn’t leave a trace... Yet still I know that none could take his place, And still, in crowds, I sometimes see his face. . . - - - (c) 1974 kaleidoscope [This message has been edited by kaleidoscope (edited 01-30-2000).] |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
This brings back memories of when my dad left...I felt devastated for a while, but I kinda got used to it after some time. Beautiful poem!  Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
This poem left me feeling sad for you ....I hope your life is filled with sunshine now - your words touched my heart........Roniece... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kaleidoscope- Tender, yet strong ... loving remembrance. You wrote this 26 years ago? How did it turn out? Do you still see his face in a crowd ... or across a 'crowded' room? Or did he return to stand by your side? Now, you've got me mystified. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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kaleidoscope Junior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 38 |
You're very inquisitive, Marge. You tickle me! Well, I wrote this at a time of an early twenty's great rebellion. Yes, he came back, and we started on a new platform, so to speak, and it has worked marvelously ever since. Here we are, deeply in love, and he's 50 and I'm nearly there. The babies have grown and gone, and we have been busy enjoying each other more than ever before. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Inquisitive? Who me? I'd prefer INTRIGUED. Well, at least you didn't call me nosey. Just happy to know that things have turned out okay. Did I say okay? I meant GREAT ! Awwwwwwww! I'm so glad. Sounds like love to me ! I think you write really nice things. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is wonderful! I love the meter too! And I'm glad to hear of the happy ending!! So nice when that happens!! Denise |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I'm sure this poem touches many..This is very beautiful writing Kaleidoscope and most gracefully expressed... I'm also glad to hear of the happy ending....'S' < !signature--> A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon [This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 01-30-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderful poem. Seems like love has a better chance of survival when it grows from the strength you found inside yourself. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I loved your poem, and I love the true ending to the story even better Liz |
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Beri Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 149 |
This did bring back many memories for me too of both an absent mother and father, but it also brought a smile to my face to see how strong of a person you are. And I'm happy to read also that you guys gave it another go and things are going great! Good for you. I did love this piece...it was so well written! If you love something, set it free, if it comes back to you, its meant to be... |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Kaleidoscope, your words are so touching......at first I felt so sad, then reading your comments to Marge, I felt very happy for you! So glad to hear the happy ending. -SEA |
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