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Watching You Smile (RG's challenge!)
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Watching You Smile (RG's challenge!) |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Sitting here in cyberland in my lonely nothingness seeking solace with strangers searching for one true heart Stolen moments of laughter mixed with painful pleading Physically she pulls you from me night after night I cry in my surrender to the sorrow of not being and yet cannot withdraw from this connection to you Seeing the love in your words Hearing tenderness in your phrases Sure that this was meant to be and afraid that it was not But in the end the truth will always rule my mind And watching you smile makes my life worthwhile |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Just beautiful...what a difficult struggle, but your poem ends on a positive plain. Neat (o: Claire |
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pigpen New Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 6Hastings,MI US |
sure that it was meant to be but afraid that it is not thats where i am now another great poem |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Sharon: You captured what I meant - perfectly! HUSG |
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simplyYRREHS Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 162 |
WOW! Whatever the challenge was, it brought something all too familiar to the foreground. Nicely done, Poet!  Sherry |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
O DeVine One, If they started paying you for this tomorrow you'd be a millionaire today.  Of course, you're already rich...in spirit. -Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I'm sure many can relate to this! Well done, Sharon! Geeze...you got this done so fast, I'm still struggling with mine! Denise |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for your kind words..I love challenge phrases..RG this was a good one.. Sam! I'll take that job!  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Devine what words WOW! You've touched my heart with this, it's BEAUTIFUL!!! |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Nicely done, PdV... If we could only write our own futures, yes??? |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Poet.....this is so touching.....extremely beautiful yet sad. I sit in awe.- SEA |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sharon- What an answer for the challenge. No wonder the rest of us are hanging back. Such a beautiful poem. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Just beautiful, plain and simply divine Omen est Nomen, The name is the sign Sad it is a little bit but so well written I love it The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Oh deVine one - very nicely written - I wish lil Queen would challenge me sometime, but, alas, I fear she knows me too well *sigh*. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I love everything you write with love So what can I say - I love it Liz |
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Buffpimp Junior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 39 |
This is very good. It is well noted that it started off positive, then negative, then positive. What a great way to end, only if all things end like that GOOD JOB! |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you again...the challenge is for all .. it's in the Challenge Forum...so LngJhn ...get thee over there to partake of it!!! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
PdV, well this is beautiful, touching and sad. Well Done!! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I've read none better you seem to have a gift I'm impressed Rex |
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