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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
I am fragmented, the pieces floating freely away. I only want to find myself, to be whole again one day. I reach out for validation, someones hand to take a hold. But yet I remain in pieces, just floating in the cold. I cry out in anger, where is the promise I've been told? The promise of love and truth? The promise on which I've been sold? Please stop pulling me apart! It pains me, can't you see? Just let me have the promise that was promised once to me. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Welcome to Passions, Kim! Wonderful poem, full of pain, well expressed. Please check your email for a special welcome! Denise |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Definitely painful, I can relate to your words well. Welcome to Passions, we're glad to have you here!  *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I definitely enjoyed this, and look forward to seeing more. Mike |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Welcome to Passions your poem is so good but so sad, I hope that you are in one piece soon The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Koon Junior Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 43Singapore |
dear childomine, aren't we all trying to piece ourselves up in this cruel world? I hope that all of us will be in one piece soon. Koon- |
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simplyYRREHS Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 162 |
Framents? I like that. I feel that often. Pieces, not yet complete, perhaps prohibited from closure, somehow, by someone... Very good writing. WELCOME!  Sherry "The finest qualities of our nature, like the bloom on fruits, can be preserved only by the most delicate handling. Yet, we do not treat ourselves nor another thus tenderly." ~Henry David Thoreau |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Wonderful first post. Joy Devotion The heart can think of no devotion Greater than being shore to the ocean- Holding the curve of one position, Counting an endless repetiton. -Robert Frost |
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jascanvey Member
since 1999-12-26
Posts 130England |
Lovely poem, thanks for posting it. I hope one day you get your wish. |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
What a great etrance into the fourums. Beautifully written. Welcome, childomine.  Gene |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
Just keep the promises you make to yourself. If they're the right promises, nothing can keep you from being whole. And the other ones, the *right* others, will come to you. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Beautifully written HUGS The grape passes through the press to yield wine. Your life must pass through the press of passion and pain to yield the wine of wisdom.. |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
Wonderfully done! WELCOME TO THE FORUM Who made you the promise? If it was a human that is all we are. I have had a recent loss and feel your pain. Paul |
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