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Chris Goodman
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0 posted 01-28-2000 09:51 PM       View Profile for Chris Goodman   Email Chris Goodman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chris Goodman

The Beach

The beach-warm breeze carries the scent of sea salt through the open window.
Yellow and white daisies fill the room with soft iridescent light.
An echo of a violin and piano fills an empty corner space.
A beautiful crocheted hanky shyly hides beneath Tiffany’s original colors.
Wrinkled black & whites take home to silver and gold frames.
Colored ones show her beautiful eyes and wild smile a little better.
Soon, the star filled sky will gently tease the room’s mirrors with glowing patterns.
Barely burnt wicks smoke slowly to a small flame.
The dusty old smell of all the room’s treasures aid in the blossom of memories.

Crashing waves now shake the Country French Chandeliers.
Mirielle loved the blue and white light that gleamed across the room. She watched boats come into the English Channel and had great plans to marry a sailor boy.  Making love to the thought had been a shameless hobby of young Mirielle.

Calais danced to the rhythm of Mirelle.  Her youthful beauty took the time to escort a bundle of countryside men.  Some came for the elaborate conversations and private dinner parties.  Others came for the exhilarating experience of brushing young Mirelle’s raven locks.  Either way Mirelle lived for each passing moment and took nothing too seriously.  If only she would have been a bit grounded.  Maybe the silver and gold frames would be filled with pictures of a family. Perhaps a husband would have left the smell of cigars and brandy.  

A great masterpiece!  “A room at the beach filled with things I loved”, by Mirelle.
If only this diary held some truth to her thoughts of love.  She did indeed love this room.
She loved her wine and song.  She adored the young sailor boys that were swept out to sea by large vessels. Yet no sign of true love.  

Perhaps the story is best without an ending.  Thinking of the beach with Mirelle is
enticing.  Life imitates art too often.  Mirelle never had a single ounce of love.  Smells do not lie nor hide the sinking truth of young Mirelle. Neither does this diary.  She died alone in this room.  She swore she would never leave Calais.  Her promise kept true.  


© Copyright 2000 Chris Goodman - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 01-28-2000 10:52 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Oh, Chris ...
this is really, really an
exciting piece with which
to enter the halls of Passion's Poets.

WELCOME !
There is much friendship and genuine
caring among the friends gathered here.
ENJOY !
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Poet deVine
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2 posted 01-28-2000 11:04 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Chris, I'm deleting the duplicates in the Pub...you'll get more replies here in Open and we discourage posting the same poem in more than one forum...thanks!!!
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3 posted 01-28-2000 11:09 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I agree. This is excellently written and very enjoyable to read. Many finely crafted lines here.
Nan
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4 posted 01-28-2000 11:23 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Nice work, Chris - I'm looking forward to reading more...
Denise
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5 posted 01-28-2000 11:49 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Captivating tale, Chris, welcome to Passions!
Please check your email for a special welcome!

Denise

[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-28-2000).]
childomine
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6 posted 01-29-2000 12:28 AM       View Profile for childomine   Email childomine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for childomine

Beautiful.  I pictured and felt it all so clearly.  I look forward to reading more.
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7 posted 01-29-2000 12:47 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Poet, yes definitely. But new? You don't fool me! Simply an amazing piece of work.

Mike
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8 posted 01-29-2000 07:40 AM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

A very interesting piece you have presented, well done and welcome to Passion

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 01-29-2000 09:08 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

I welcome you to Passions with a standing ovation!
Great writing!
Liz
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10 posted 01-29-2000 10:09 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Excellent writing Chris....I look forward to reading more of your pieces..
A big Welcome to Passions!  

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 01-29-2000 11:33 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Chris,
I really enjoyed this piece, welcone here and I'm looking forward to more.
Martie
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12 posted 01-29-2000 02:16 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

What wonderful, descriptive writing!  I really enjoyed reading this piece and look forward to more.  Welcome!
Auricom45
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13 posted 01-29-2000 02:26 PM       View Profile for Auricom45   Email Auricom45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Auricom45's Home Page   View IP for Auricom45

Chris
Awesome debut! Very visual and it tickles the five senses like no other poem can. I'll be looking forward to your other works.

Auricom

 "We have bigger houses and smaller families; more conveniences, but less time; we have more degrees, but less sense; more knowledge, but less judgement; more experts, but more problems; more medicine, but less wellness. We have multiplies our possessions, but reduced our values. We've learned how to make a living, but not a life."
Gene
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14 posted 01-29-2000 03:58 PM       View Profile for Gene   Email Gene   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Gene's Home Page   View IP for Gene

Welcome Chris, A great entrance into the forums. I wish mine was that good. Nice job!  

~Gene
Meadowmuse
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15 posted 01-29-2000 04:06 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

How detailed and sad. Artfully shared, thank you.

Dear LadyClaire


Severn
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16 posted 01-29-2000 04:18 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Welcome to Passions, Chris...

This is marvellous!!

    

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
sandgrain
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17 posted 01-29-2000 04:27 PM       View Profile for sandgrain   Email sandgrain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sandgrain

A delicacy on the readers palate for sure. Welcome.
 
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