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Obsession

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Toerag
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0 posted 01-28-2000 10:25 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Toerag

Bored
In my motel
Open the door
The boredom is hell
Down to the bar
Have a stiff drink
Just three other folks
I sit there and think

Two fat guys
With a lady so fine
Sitting at a table
They finished their wine.

They soon left
Their glasses now empty
I walked to the table,
Touched her glass gently.



[This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 01-28-2000).]
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Martie
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1 posted 01-28-2000 10:36 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Sounds like lonley to me, but you did paint a very real picture here and the ending was very touching.  Hugs!
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2 posted 01-28-2000 10:44 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Wow!! I like this one very much, Toe...
fc
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3 posted 01-28-2000 10:47 AM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fc

wow, I hadn't seen free verse from you like this, very nice work  
Corinne
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4 posted 01-28-2000 10:51 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Was that YOU????  

All kiddin' aside, just the right touch of gentle poignancy, Toe. Me thinks you might actually be a gentle man, hiding oft times behind dry wit (but your secret is safe with me).


Corinne

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5 posted 01-28-2000 10:52 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Toe - this is the Toe who we see only a little, and too little at that.  Very succinct, old man.  I like it a lot because there was a time I could have written it, too.

On the lighter side, did you palm the generous tip and go have another beer?  lol
Toerag
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6 posted 01-28-2000 10:55 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

ROTFLMAO@tip....you nut!
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7 posted 01-28-2000 11:09 AM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Hotel bars are sad it's true
There's usually not a lot to do,
You flip around and if you're able,
Sometimes there'll be somethin on cable.


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8 posted 01-28-2000 12:53 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

A glimpse at your tender side, Toe! This is sweet!

Denise
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Wow Toe...I found this to be one of the best pieces of work I have ever seen from you. Wonderfully written and free verse too  
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10 posted 01-28-2000 04:01 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Toe, when a ya gonna learn? You're not supposed to be looking for a piece of glass......


Other than that, the writing is great!
Toerag
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11 posted 01-28-2000 04:09 PM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

thanx "Deer".....really.....
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Toe, you have the biggest heart! I'm so glad you show it. -SEA
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It's nice to see your sweet side Toe, of course we all KNOW it's in there!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Nan
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Toe's writing such good stuff, I'm putting my eraser in the drawer...
Elizabeth Santos
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15 posted 01-29-2000 03:43 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Hey, this is a very sweet poem
I like the ending
Love ya
Liz
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16 posted 01-29-2000 05:56 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

So, so fine Toerag.
I know that feeling.
Loved this poem.
So gently revealing.
James
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17 posted 01-29-2000 01:06 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Toe-
This is so tender.
I think it suits your heart.
~*Marge*~



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Nate Dogg
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18 posted 01-29-2000 01:10 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

I loved this poem Toerag!

 Nathan
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19 posted 01-29-2000 01:26 PM       View Profile for dvlishimp   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dvlishimp

What a beautiful piece. Makes me want to sigh at the way fate effects our lives.
{{{{Toe}}}}
Keep sharing your heart and humor with us.

And thank you for the glimpse of both.  

 And where two raging fires meet together, They do consume the thing that feeds their fury.
Shakespeare
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20 posted 01-29-2000 01:31 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine



I sat there waiting
bored with the meeting
seeing you sitting
at the bar

I tried to smile
in your direction
but you seemed
bored with it all

My clients decided
to leave too soon
for me to catch
your eye

Leaving, I turned
to see you
touch my glass
so sweetly

My heart stopped
at the missed chance
of meeting one
as tender as you



[This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 01-29-2000).]
JTF
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21 posted 01-31-2000 03:58 AM       View Profile for JTF   Email JTF   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for JTF

Great piece Old Man ... I do like your serious schtuff ... well, I like your funny side as well ... hmmmm, does that mean I like *you* ? ...  
 
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