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When you said,"I'm Going Away." (For J.D.) wherever he is

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Temptress
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0 posted 01-28-2000 06:43 AM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Temptress

Yes
I read it, Love
Those words
Black on white
The ones you thought so impersonal
It wasn't the first time
I had read those words before
So I tried not to panic.
You thought you were free of me once before,
But I halted your efforts
With a final explanation
That I believed not the rumors,
And a number where you could reach me.
Yes, that stopped you in your tracks, Love.
Then one day through all the talking and trust
You said," I'm leaving her for good this time,
And only I had faith that you would.
Not that you did it for me.
I knew it was for yourself
And was the only one who could sense your determination
And truth.
Now...
An e-mail of all things slaps me in my face.
"I'm going away"
That is how it began.
Well, you did
And still we speak on occasion
Each time I remember whispered nights
Forbidden for me then
Because after you left her
You were free from that guilt.
You apologized for heartache
I said you never caused me.
Its been a while now since I've called.
But unfailingly on cue to my distant voice
I'm cute in your eyes all over again
And you try to melt me
By calling me
"My Sweet"
You always did keep your promises.
Now I'm left with contemplation
Of our past.



 Don't gain my affections and cover my eyes. In blindness I will only swing harder.
© Copyright 2000 Jennifer - All Rights Reserved
tracie66
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1 posted 01-28-2000 08:51 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Dear temptress
Wow this was soo deep. very good   tracie  
Local Rebel
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2 posted 01-28-2000 09:06 AM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Hmmm... very nice poem, but a dilema ... here's to careful deliberation and good luck!  
Corinne
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3 posted 01-28-2000 11:48 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Hi, Temptress, my friend.  

A deeply emotional outpouring, hon.

Seek the love that doesn't tear you down, the heart that only lifts yours, where darkness and guilt dwell not. This is where happiness is found.


And thank you again for telling me about his great family of poets!

Corinne

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4 posted 01-28-2000 11:54 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Nicely done, Temptress.  And I agree with Corinne....seek the love that doesn't tear you down for the kind that does isn't worth the time or pain.
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5 posted 01-28-2000 12:02 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Excellent writing, Temptress. You want some of my rhyming elixir? I'll share it gladly for a dose of your free verse excellence  
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6 posted 01-28-2000 12:26 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Excellent work, Temptress!!
Temptress
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7 posted 01-28-2000 07:29 PM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

Thanks everyone.  I thought this one would sink fast.
Corinne: You are welcome of course. I'm a walking advertisement for this place in chat rooms sometimes. I'm glad to see you here and also glad to see you enjoying yourself.

Balladeer:
An equal exchange then?   There are side effects ya know! Free-verse is addictive. I won't be held responsible. *winks*


 Don't gain my affections and cover my eyes. In blindness I will only swing harder.
Nan
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8 posted 01-28-2000 11:00 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Hm... where to start, eh??

I hope he's well... That really does concern me sometimes, ya know??
Temptress
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9 posted 01-29-2000 12:09 AM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

Nan, thanks for reading this. I think he is well. At this point, this poem seems selfish, but occasionally I get the most distant of friends on my mind. Like something is prompting me to reach out. Like they might be needing a shoulder. Does that makes sense? I believe there is a connection to friends.

 Don't gain my affections and cover my eyes. In blindness I will only swing harder.
Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 01-29-2000 04:28 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Well, this poem isn't sinking that fast, cause I'm bringing it to the top again.
You are right about your distant friends. We all need a lifeline at times, and there's nothing more soothing than hearing from an old friend. I liked the poem, you can be torn between emotion and reality at times. In this case, reality probably wins
Very well written
Liz
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11 posted 02-25-2001 03:52 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

just been searching. . . you never know what you'll find back here. . .

I know where this one comes from. . .

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