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Corinne
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0 posted 01-27-2000 11:48 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corinne



Smoke

We watched the unreal scene,
shaken, shocked and cold.
Swift officials moved in
harmonious action.
I felt beholden
to the firemen,
police,
ambulance crews,
and marveled at their
commonality,
a mixture of
efficiency,
strength and
compassion.

Only an outer shell vestige,
smoke long diminished
a stench Iíll never forget.

The call came after midnight,
by then she was gone.
Detectives ruminating,
perhaps she had fallen asleep
while smoking,
or left a candle burning?

The coroner found
booze in her blood,
a lifelong pattern
of furtive drinking,
in the end, redemption.

She never heard the fireís roar.

Someone once told me that the heat
sears the lungs immediately,
and death is rapid.
I allow myself this
belief.


© Copyright 2000 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 01-28-2000 12:32 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Wow, and ouch.

Mike
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Absolutely speachless here
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3 posted 01-28-2000 05:58 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Corinne-
This touches my heart.
Sadly, it touches my heart.
This feels very real.
~*Marge*~


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4 posted 01-28-2000 10:08 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Corinne:  HUGS sweetheart

 Feed your dreams with love...
Toerag
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5 posted 01-28-2000 10:12 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Wow Corinne....!
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 01-28-2000 10:17 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Corinne,
Well done, good construction and a good poem.
Nan
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7 posted 01-28-2000 08:55 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Let's bring this wonderful work back for another round...
Corinne
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8 posted 01-28-2000 09:27 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Thank you, Mike, Hoot Owl, Marge, Rainbow, Toe, Seymore and Nan.

Corinne
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9 posted 01-28-2000 09:39 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Corinne, this is so painful. I hurt reading this. You tell such a vivid story with your written word. -SEA
Corinne
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10 posted 01-29-2000 02:36 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Dear SEA,

thank you.  I was very hesitant to post this,
too much of a downer, I thought.

This woman wasn't a nice woman at all.  But no one deserves to go like that...

Corinne
 
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