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Severn
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0 posted 01-27-2000 11:37 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

*I wrote this today in a bookstore my friend and I went to where they had Magnetic poetry. We divided up the provided words and this is what I got out of about 50 words - hard work!*

     ~~~~~


Woman
      Man

Frantic heave
        these blue moments
black languid spray
        a storm sky whispers

        mist

with only you

weak life bitter
         and they together
lather delicate love

         worship

smooth shadow place

picture their need
          then cry
like the shot sun above

          but

wind blown want

      must part


28.01.2000




 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
© Copyright 2000 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
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Wow...I think I need to buy myself some of those words  
I'd like to buy a noun  
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2 posted 01-28-2000 12:34 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Wonderful writing. And you're definitely an artist, if you can take pieces of magnetic plastic and turn it into something as image-laden and thoughtful as that.

Mike
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Berry interesting K... you still do well, even within boundaries!
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4 posted 01-28-2000 05:24 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Kamla-
The magnetism of this piece
pulls us to you.
What a talent, young lady.
~*Marge*~


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5 posted 01-28-2000 07:20 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Kamla, excellent work my friend!!! An Artist indeed sweet butterfly!!!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


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Awesome, you've blown me away. Excellent piece of work  
Elizabeth Santos
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Kamla,
Please give me some of your words
This is great
Liz
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Excellent!

I will have to finally break out the set of words that I bought a while ago and see what happens. . .

Beautiful. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Denise
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Wow! You did an excellent job with the words provided. Seems like it would be very hard to do!
Martie
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I already knew you were amazing.
HelmutB
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Very nice line up of words I can imagine this ain't easy to do, I like it. Thank you

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

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12 posted 01-28-2000 04:32 PM       View Profile for Ted Reynolds   Email Ted Reynolds   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ted Reynolds

A great example of how self-demanded limits and rules can frequently expand, rather than contract, poetic creativity.  Hence sonnets and vilanelles.  But I don't remember such a effective case of voluntarily limiting one's vocabulary.  Well done!  
 
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