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That Place(A challenge from hoot owl)

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White Wolf
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Somewhere in the vast wastelan


0 posted 01-27-2000 03:08 PM       View Profile for White Wolf   Email White Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for White Wolf

There is a place we all know
Deep within our hearts
Where shadows and doubts roam
That are hidden from the start

We all go there from time to time
To that place that darkness now claims
Trying to explain why we committed those crimes
Even now we still cannot explain

In the streets are children crying
How could you have left so much undone
You say that you are trying
Yet what you need, still needs to be done

One child stands before you
With small hands rubbing his eyes
With a look you realize he looks like you do
You take him in your arms and start to cry

He starts to tell you his crimes
As you realize they are your own
The church bell now chimes
Now is the time for the seed to be sown

You see that he is you and you are him
Now is the time to forget but first you must forgive


This is a poem about how I have tended to forgive others but neglected to forgive myself of the wrongs and mistakes I have committed.  I go to this place often so that I can forgive myself of these, especially some of the long burried ones.


 "Life's greatest mystery isn't the meaning of life. To love and be loved is the meaning of life. Now how to attain those is the greatest mystery of all."
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hoot_owl_rn
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Glen Hope, PA USA


1 posted 01-27-2000 03:17 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

For anyone interested...the challange I posted was to use the line:
In the streets are children crying

Challange well met here  
Justbleu
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Oregon, Originally From Alaska


2 posted 01-27-2000 10:03 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

I agree with Hoot.  The challenge was met very well!!  I like this a lot...I can relate to the feelings in this!!  I so often find myself trying to explain WHY....but not getting anywhere!!  Keep writing...

Take Care
Bridgette


 Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved."
Justbleu
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3 posted 06-20-2000 08:04 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Quite possibly my favorite of yours here!!  Yes, I returned to read again!!  I liked this one a lot even though it made me a little sad!!  I can also soo relate to this!!

Bridgette


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4 posted 04-18-2004 10:43 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

I relate to this so well, this is a deep write
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