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Fetus #2 (the deeper version)

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Nate Dogg
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0 posted 01-27-2000 02:16 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg


My existance in my mommy's womb,
forced her body to create some extra room.
I came straight from miracleland,
with my skin color being as pure as sand.
Right now, I'm twitching in my mommy's tummy
because, I'm very happy.
I'm glad that she decided to have me
because, one chance was all I needed.
Once my eyes wre fully developed,
I began to look out of the belly button window.
I saw my dad wearing a frown
and I'm wondering if they even want me around.
If not, I'll be back in miracleland,
until I'm eventually in the right hands.
I'm hopping that my parents agree on this
because, life was something that I couldn't miss!
I think that my parents don't even want me
and if that's so, then I will become very angry.
Well, they got 120 days to seal my fate
but it seems like a choice,
that they don't wanna take.
Four months passed by
and I guess that they wanna keep me
but, I still don't know if they are happy.
Everytime I look outside,
the light kills my eyes.
I got so much curiosity in me,
that I can't hold it inside.
Mommy was sitting down resting
and asking her doctor some questions.
I heard music in the background,
so I moved my hands and feet up and down.
It's no surprise that most black babies have rhythm
because, it seems as if it was born in them.
I'm eating food from mommy's tube
and I'm all covered in this thick goo.
My umbilical cord was giving me trouble,
as it increased by the double.
Eventually, it was choking me!
Time was getting closer,
as poppa played the opposer,
in the clinic,
till the last minute.
I'm watching my parents argue,
over what to do.
Everytime they fight,
I wondered if I would ever see the light.
This place called "world", was so large to my view,
that when I get out of here,
I wouldn't know what to do.
Month five went by and so did month six,
and one day, I heard mommy calling me "Rick".
Month seven went by and so did minth eight
and it was quicker than I could anticipate.
I wanted to be born in June
but God had already decided my time
and he said "soon".
Finally it's Sept. 13, 1983 and I'm ready!
I was very happy as everybody waited for me.
My head popped out
and  my first screams escaped from my mouth.
Tears were falling down my parents eyes
because, the sight of me,
was too hard to hold inside.
They decided to keep me after all
bacause, they realized that it was God's call.
Pops said, " we have a good looking baby
and he looks just like me!
Daddy carefully placed me in mommmy's arm,
without any harm.
Finally , I got to see my mommy.
As she held me by her side,
I looked at her and saw all the love in her eyes.
At that point, I saw why she decided to keep me.


 Nathan
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Denise
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1 posted 01-27-2000 02:22 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Mother's eyes do have that special look, don't they, Nate? Say are you really that young? Or is this about somebody else?!

CrazyChick
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2 posted 01-28-2000 02:12 AM       View Profile for CrazyChick   Email CrazyChick   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CrazyChick

Beautiful Poem!!!!!!!!!    
devina
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3 posted 01-28-2000 02:42 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Young or not, Nate, you're thinking from a point of view that some of us never would...quite an interesting piece you have here!!! Never knew there was a belly-button window...but cute idea!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Marge Tindal
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4 posted 01-28-2000 05:47 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Nate-
What a tender look at
life about to be ...
and then the miracle of it all.
Poignant piece.
~*Marge*~


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Nate Dogg
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5 posted 01-29-2000 12:45 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Thank you all for the wonderful replies!

 Nathan
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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6 posted 01-29-2000 04:39 PM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

A tender, poignant story with a unique viewpoint!  I like it very much!  Glad it has a happy ending.
Denise
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7 posted 01-29-2000 09:48 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Hey, Nate! You didn't answer my question!! lol

Denise
Nate Dogg
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8 posted 02-01-2000 10:36 AM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Hey Denise, I'm young but not that young. Don't worry, I'll reveal my age in one of my poems!

 Nathan
Denise
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Well, now you've piqued my curiosity! I'll be on the look out for it!  
Denise
JamesMichael
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10 posted 10-17-2000 07:52 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Nate this is a nice interesting read from a baby's perspective...one that was very happy to be born into loving arms...James
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