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Burke
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0 posted 2000-01-27 01:19 PM



Down through the years I've gained and lost I couldn't begin to calculate the cost! There have been those who've seen me with "it all" the ones who're the closest saw me take the fall. The path I was on was of my own choosing no time to turn around and see all I was loosing. To late to cry and complain, I just have to deal with the pain. Now that I have straitened up and am learning to live, I finally realize that this world has alot to give. I can only wish for a life now try and get it back somehow. I'm starting to say I'm sorry as never before too late now they've already shut the door! I wish I could go back just a year or two, there are so many different things I would do! I hope my mother doesn't just sit and cry, and if she does I know I'm the reason why. Although I hide the pain with a forced smile somehow I will make all this worth while. For now all my hopes and dreams are put on hold, how can this world be so bitter, so unfair, so cold? This is the part of my life I,ve
been dreading, because I knew all along where I was heading. Changing now even though I know it's way to late, makes it easier to deal with this sudden twist of fate. But life still goes on so they say, it must have been intended to be this way. If there was one thing I could say to those who are free  "straighten up damn it,don't be like me"! All alone with no place to hide keeping your feelings locked inside. But I still have my pride and my
undyimg dreams and, with those it's not as bad as it seems. Never give up hope believe in who you are
thats the best advice I can give so far. So with
this being said I hope you understand, take life
easy try to be your own man, to be like someone
else makes no sence at all! Take pride in yourself learn to stand tall. I'll be home one day having this in the past, and just like Martin Luther King said "Ill be free at last"!!

© Copyright 2000 Burke - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth
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1 posted 2000-01-27 01:31 PM


You have learned an important lesson here, Burke. You well described the lesson and the emotions you felt in this poem. I hope that everything works out for you in your life. Oh, and welcome to Passions!

Elizabeth

 "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!"
-The Crucible


Danny Holloway
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2 posted 2000-01-27 02:46 PM


You acknowledge your mistakes and that puts you on the path to overcoming this downturn you must endure.  Keep your head up and your heart open.  There's sunshine out there!

If you'd life someone to talk to, click my profile and e-mail me anytime.

Good Luck!
DH


 

Denise
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3 posted 2000-01-27 03:57 PM


Welcome to Passions, Burke! It is the wise person who learns from their mistakes! Please check your email for a special welcome!

Denise

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4 posted 2000-01-27 04:03 PM


This was an interesting style for a poem, Burke.  I caught myself slipping into a rhythm that your stlye almost demanded I ignore.  Welcome to Passions.

Denise.... and NOW Burke gets email, too?  *sniffles*

HelmutB
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5 posted 2000-01-27 04:35 PM


I welcome thee...
wise words of poerty I see
So well constructed and set in place
You learned I see and found new ways
Well done


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


Marilyn
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6 posted 2000-01-27 06:49 PM


Welcome to Passions! "Free at last, Free at last! Thank God almighty, free at last!" Strong and wise words you have here. It is a pity it takes us so very long and so much pain to learn these lessons.
Saxoness
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7 posted 2000-01-27 09:10 PM


Well, I have to admit I was attracted to this piece because my last name is Burke. But, I'm glad I read it! Wonderful work, Burke.

 "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot


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