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Corinne
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Breathe


Breathe deep, my motherís skin,
both pleasant and bitter,
Grandpaís coat, tobacco and peppermint
and something foul
(that turned out to be alcohol).

Draw in the memory of salt and spray
my beloved ocean
still calming on the worst of days.
Breathe deep, cocoa butter, patouli oil and
plumeria, cheap perfumes of the teen years,
pungent green leaves burning
mixed with the sweat of bodies
rock concerts;
colognes from men of the past
(I hate the scent of cologne on men).

Breathe in, vanilla redwood trees,
fireplaces in the winter,
co-mingling scents of San Francisco.

Remembering the scents of my babies.

Forgetting the stink of death.

How I imagine your skin, I inhale.

© 2000 Corinne Bailey

© Copyright 2000 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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Scent, I think, is one of the strongest memory joggers that there is. The ocean is by far my favorite one too! This is beautiful, Corinne! I always look forward to reading your wonderful poems!

Denise
HelmutB
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Very nice poem. I agree with Denise the smell or scent of the open ocean is my favortite too.

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

devina
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great images here Corinne, I think mountain air would be my favorite!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Martie
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I love scent--an invisible thing with such impact--oh that wonderful little boy sweat smell after the soccar game--from my kids of long ago--still get a whif now and then.

Wonderful poem!
Parker
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Corinne, another wonder you have here. I love the smell of spring when it comes to Canada after a very cold winter.

Parker
Corinne
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Thank you Denise, Helmut, Devina, Martie, and Haleyja!

Wrote this in response to another poet's Breathe poem.  The memories triggered by scent are so individual, made me immediately think of what scents triggered nostalgia in me.

Challenge, anyone?

LOL

Corinne
lasexycat
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oh yes, the ocean by far, is most celestial, calls me always, smell it, hear it, breathe it.  Very Nice.
Toerag
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Ahhh...but the scent of a woman is my favorite...Now then young lady...I've seen your posts! "What have I ever done to you?"....Maybe you just need a good lickin'?.....Now then....which kind do I administer?......Both maybe?....LOL....Nice poem gal.....
Corinne
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Holy cow, Toe, have you ever got my number!

I must learn to bury my metaphors more carefully and write words of utter obscurity
(well, I probably already do that!).

Yeah, a good lickin' is just what the doctor ordered, um hmmm!

Corinne
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Great poem... great visit to the aroma therapy of memories. *S*
hoot_owl_rn
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Excellent post...amazing how little things like certain scents can bring back a wave of emotions and memories
 
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