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White Wolf
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Somewhere in the vast wasteland

0 posted 2000-01-26 04:42 AM


You say you love me
You say you are here for me

Where is your love
Where are you when I need you

As I sit here
Fire blazing
Stars shining
Trees swaying

As I look out into this beyond
I feel traped and lost
Abandoned and alone
Wondering how I will survive

What is this that I now see
It seems to want me to follow
Shimmering in starlight
I follow her to that place between

In the moonlight, shadows dancing
You stand waiting for me
Your eyes full of love
And with that smile on your face

I tried to ask a question
She put her finger to my lips
Then she whispered
Just dance with me

And so we danced
And so we loved

Why does it have to be so hard
Why do we have to lose those we love

Shhhhh...
Just dance with me


Not my best work but I am experimenting.


 "Life's greatest mystery isn't the meaning of life. To love and be loved is the meaning of life. Now how to attain those is the greatest mystery of all."

© Copyright 2000 Justin D. Schroeder - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2000-01-26 07:39 AM


Scorched Dragon-

If this is experimenting ...
then your chemistry teacher would be proud.
Mysteriously it works for me.
Drawn to read it more than once ...
experiment on !
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 2000-01-26 08:36 AM


Intriguing poem. Challange well met. Thank you  
White Wolf
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3 posted 2000-01-26 12:41 PM


Thank you both, hoot owl and Marge.  I didn't quite know what to expect when I put that phrase, I was to use, in my head.  But it looks like it turned out ok.  Thanx for the challenge.
White Wolf
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4 posted 2000-01-26 12:41 PM


I forgot to add that I look forward to more challenges in the future.< !signature-->

 "Life's greatest mystery isn't the meaning of life.  To love and be loved is the meaning of life. Now how to attain those is the greatest mystery of all."


[This message has been edited by Scorched Dragon (edited 01-26-2000).]

SEA
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5 posted 2000-01-26 01:39 PM


So very lovely..... great way to meet a challange! -SEA
Marilyn
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6 posted 2000-01-26 06:07 PM


Bravo! I am always amazed with ones who write free verse so very well. The meter in the line Hoot gave so too powerful for me to resist. I wish I could write free verse so wonderfully.  
White Wolf
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7 posted 2000-01-26 06:37 PM


Marilyn and SEA- This is the first challenge I have met and it seems that I have done better with it that I thought.  Thanx for your comments and praise.  I don't know if it is free verse(I was never good at english), but I do know I tend to call it, the voice of my heart.

 "Life's greatest mystery isn't the meaning of life. To love and be loved is the meaning of life. Now how to attain those is the greatest mystery of all."

Tara Simms
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8 posted 2000-01-26 10:27 PM


And what a beautiful voice it is!
White Wolf
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9 posted 2000-01-27 02:44 AM


Thank you Tara.  You are a poet with a beautiful voice too.  I visited your web site and read some wonderful poetry that really speaks.  Thanx for sharing.

 "Life's greatest mystery isn't the meaning of life. To love and be loved is the meaning of life. Now how to attain those is the greatest mystery of all."

Justbleu
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10 posted 2000-02-03 11:17 AM


If you are just experimenting here...keep it up!!  I liked this very much!!  I'm glad you are able to find a place of comfort!!

Take Care
Bridgette




 Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved."

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