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Just Dance With Me(Hoot's challenge)

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White Wolf
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Somewhere in the vast wastelan


0 posted 01-26-2000 04:42 AM       View Profile for White Wolf   Email White Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for White Wolf

You say you love me
You say you are here for me

Where is your love
Where are you when I need you

As I sit here
Fire blazing
Stars shining
Trees swaying

As I look out into this beyond
I feel traped and lost
Abandoned and alone
Wondering how I will survive

What is this that I now see
It seems to want me to follow
Shimmering in starlight
I follow her to that place between

In the moonlight, shadows dancing
You stand waiting for me
Your eyes full of love
And with that smile on your face

I tried to ask a question
She put her finger to my lips
Then she whispered
Just dance with me

And so we danced
And so we loved

Why does it have to be so hard
Why do we have to lose those we love

Shhhhh...
Just dance with me


Not my best work but I am experimenting.


 "Life's greatest mystery isn't the meaning of life. To love and be loved is the meaning of life. Now how to attain those is the greatest mystery of all."
© Copyright 2000 Justin D. Schroeder - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 01-26-2000 07:39 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Scorched Dragon-

If this is experimenting ...
then your chemistry teacher would be proud.
Mysteriously it works for me.
Drawn to read it more than once ...
experiment on !
~*Marge*~



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2 posted 01-26-2000 08:36 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Intriguing poem. Challange well met. Thank you  
White Wolf
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3 posted 01-26-2000 12:41 PM       View Profile for White Wolf   Email White Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for White Wolf

Thank you both, hoot owl and Marge.  I didn't quite know what to expect when I put that phrase, I was to use, in my head.  But it looks like it turned out ok.  Thanx for the challenge.
White Wolf
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4 posted 01-26-2000 12:41 PM       View Profile for White Wolf   Email White Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for White Wolf

I forgot to add that I look forward to more challenges in the future.

 "Life's greatest mystery isn't the meaning of life.  To love and be loved is the meaning of life. Now how to attain those is the greatest mystery of all."


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with you


5 posted 01-26-2000 01:39 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

So very lovely..... great way to meet a challange! -SEA
Marilyn
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6 posted 01-26-2000 06:07 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Bravo! I am always amazed with ones who write free verse so very well. The meter in the line Hoot gave so too powerful for me to resist. I wish I could write free verse so wonderfully.  
White Wolf
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7 posted 01-26-2000 06:37 PM       View Profile for White Wolf   Email White Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for White Wolf

Marilyn and SEA- This is the first challenge I have met and it seems that I have done better with it that I thought.  Thanx for your comments and praise.  I don't know if it is free verse(I was never good at english), but I do know I tend to call it, the voice of my heart.

 "Life's greatest mystery isn't the meaning of life. To love and be loved is the meaning of life. Now how to attain those is the greatest mystery of all."
Tara Simms
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8 posted 01-26-2000 10:27 PM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

And what a beautiful voice it is!
White Wolf
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9 posted 01-27-2000 02:44 AM       View Profile for White Wolf   Email White Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for White Wolf

Thank you Tara.  You are a poet with a beautiful voice too.  I visited your web site and read some wonderful poetry that really speaks.  Thanx for sharing.

 "Life's greatest mystery isn't the meaning of life. To love and be loved is the meaning of life. Now how to attain those is the greatest mystery of all."
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10 posted 02-03-2000 11:17 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

If you are just experimenting here...keep it up!!  I liked this very much!!  I'm glad you are able to find a place of comfort!!

Take Care
Bridgette




 Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved."
 
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