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AngelSamsMom
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since 1999-09-17
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Seattle, WA, USA

0 posted 2000-01-25 02:34 PM


Two Hearts Bleed as one

Pretty blue eyes
With such a beautiful face
Wouldn’t you say
Love is such a disgrace

The day you left me I knew
Tears born of regection
So sorry we’re threw

The pain was traped from the tear’s I cry
Theres no more love for me
I’d try if only you’d come
Back to me

So I walk into a ball room
Sit upon a chair
Love song’s on the radio
Takes me back to when you where there

I look over my shoulder
The tears they start to fall
And even though you walked out the door
I can still here your loving call

But just before she left
These soft words were said

Like a blade against my heart
Supposen we tried
Right now I’m falling
And its just like I died

And as I close my window’s to the world
Painted pictures in my mind
I’m so sorry to hurt you
But I can’t come back this time

I now know the day’s
As I sit up at night
Smoke my last cigerette
My tear’s filled with fright
Because now I am nothing
Except what I have become
But even now, I know
Two hearts bleed as one

©Copyrighted January 23, 2000
By Michael W Stimatze




 My heart will go on, my tears I will cry, My laughter will fade, but for all this I do for the love of Sammy

© Copyright 2000 AngelSamsMom - All Rights Reserved
Anne
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since 1999-12-31
Posts 78

1 posted 2000-01-25 05:14 PM


Oh, such a sad poem!  There are a few phrases that really stick with me--"Now I am nothing/except what I've become"--I love that!
Great job!  

Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

2 posted 2000-01-25 07:25 PM


Very sad and beautiful. I enjoyed this!

Denise

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