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Open Poetry #5

Fetus (version #1)

Nate Dogg
Senior Member

since 1999-11-15

Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton

0 posted 2000-01-25 02:28 PM

I hope y'll like the poem.

I existed in my mommy's womb,
a month after conception.
By the end of the second month,
my heart was established in four sections.
Month three, I excitedly jerked my body
and flexed my tiny legs and arms.
Month four, I grew some more
and now I'm bigger than before.
Month five, I growed by a few more inches,
as I increased my hearing senses.
By month six, I was kicking my mommy's cervix.
By month seven, I can taste the sweet food,
that mommy's feeding me
and I think that I'll become a sugar junkie,
once I get out of my mother's body.
By month eight, my lungs are steadily increasing,
causing to to have an easier time breathing.
By the end of the ninth month, I shall be out
and ready to experience,
first-hand what life is all about.

PS. If any of you think I left a lot to be desired,
don't worry because, I'm working on a deeper version.

Nathan

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

1 posted 2000-01-25 03:01 PM

Well, you've certainly covered the basics here, Nate. Can't wait to see the deeper version!

Denise

Ted Reynolds
Member

since 1999-12-15

Posts 331

2 posted 2000-01-25 03:13 PM

Obviously a labor of love!

What about calling it simply "The Miracle"?

RainbowGirl
Member Elite

since 1999-07-31

Posts 3023
United Kingdom

3 posted 2000-01-25 05:33 PM

I have to say I'm smiling here because to spend the time makes me think you're in love with children...ok, maybe not but I'm still smiling and LOL @ sugar junkie...

HUGS

Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.

Nate Dogg
Senior Member

since 1999-11-15

Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton

4 posted 2000-01-25 05:56 PM

Thank you Denise, I promise that it will be a good one.
Thank you Ted for your nice comments.
Thank you Rainbowgirl, for your nice comments also.

Nathan

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