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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2000-01-25 11:47 AM


In the Moonlight Shadows Dancing

In the moonlight shadows dancing
Prancing wild across my bed
Visions of the past entrancing
Entomb my room, consume my head

You in fanciful romancing
Moments rationed, passion dared
Gloom has strewn the moon's enchanting
Ashen shadows, passion shared

Entranced was I at your first glancing
Slow advancing 'cross the room
You danced and took a step perchancing
Flower in bloom you would consume

Now exhumed, the visions prancing
So entrancing is the sight
In the moonlight shadows dancing
'Cross my bed in deep of night

Elizabeth Santos




[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 01-25-2000).]

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vandana
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1 posted 2000-01-25 12:00 PM


Enjoy your poem!!!!!!
hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 2000-01-25 12:31 PM


Lovely internal and external rhyme, wonderful rhythm...challange well met in this wonderfully written poem  
Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2000-01-25 12:34 PM


Elizabeth, my friend-

Your beautiful poem was better than
the 'Blue Plate Special' at the diner
down the road.
(And I didn't have to leave a tip !)

You know you're addicted when you'd
rather read poetry than eat !

Absolutely enchanting !
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Denise
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4 posted 2000-01-25 12:35 PM


This is beautiful, Elizabeth!! Welcome to the 'dancing circle'. Ruth really came up with a great challenge that seems to be sparking many people's creative imaginations!       
Elizabeth Santos
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5 posted 2000-01-25 01:19 PM


Vandana, Thanks for your kind remark and for your lovely e-mail
Liz

Hoot, Thanks so much, this one was a little slow coming.

Marge, I have got to tell you, that is absolutley the finest compliment I have ever had. Just imagine, writing a poem that's better than the "blue plate special" at the local diner. I feel that I am rising in stature as a poet. Thank you so much for such unworthy praise (hehe-you crack me up!)
Love ya,
Liz

Denise, Thank you, but your "dancing" poem was exquisite. I love it
Liz

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 01-25-2000).]

Sunshine
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6 posted 2000-01-25 01:44 PM


So glad you found time to visit Ruth's "circle"...I will have to edit my first version to include all of the members who've come in since Monday...LOL!

Good job, Elizabeth S.!  [By the way, I've given you a little nickname - "The Wise Elizabeth" who knows all, sees all, and can read Sy's mind!]

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow



Martie
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7 posted 2000-01-25 01:59 PM


Liz--I knew you would succumb to this wonderful phrase and come up with something that captured it completely.
Martie
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8 posted 2000-01-25 02:00 PM


Liz--I knew you would succumb to this wonderful phrase and come up with something that captured it completely.
Meadowmuse
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9 posted 2000-01-25 02:12 PM


Acutely beautiful, Elizabeth...painful and poignant, exquisitely fashioned. Once again, you've taken my breath with your words...

Claire

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10 posted 2000-01-25 02:21 PM


Elizabeth, this is amazing. I really enjoyed it. -SEA
Bad Boy
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11 posted 2000-01-25 05:30 PM


It seems everyone(even Toe) is having Moonlight Shadow Dances?
This is another that is very well written.
But it`s still not gunna soften this guy up

Thank`s for sharing Elizabeth




 The Devil Made Me Do It.


RainbowGirl
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12 posted 2000-01-25 05:42 PM


Elizabeth: Superb reply

"In the moonlight shadows dancing
'Cross my bed in deep of night"

Oh my...that line will stay with me..

HUGS


 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.


Seymour Tabin
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13 posted 2000-01-25 07:44 PM


Elizabeth,
This is poetry as poetry should be.
As pure as the foam on the waves at sea.
And if I were a shadow upon your bed,
I would build you a palace within your head.
Dance you forever into the night.
And only you could turn on the light.
Love Sy


Elizabeth Santos
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14 posted 2000-01-25 09:24 PM


Sunshine, Thanks,dear,for such sweet remarks.
Yeh, I wish I knew what was going through his head.

Martie, Such high praise for a poet with no words. Thanks

Claire, Wow, such kind comments. Thanks

Bad Boy, Just give it a little time. Thanks for the comments

Rainbow, dear, you are so sweet to say this after your absolutely marvelous poem. Thanks so much

Liz

Elizabeth Santos
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15 posted 2000-01-25 09:26 PM


Sy,
Thank you for the beautiful response. A poem to consume my head
Love ya,
Liz

Eloise
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16 posted 2000-01-26 01:18 AM


Liz, absolutely exquisite!  
Elizabeth Santos
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17 posted 2000-01-26 08:35 AM


Eloise,
Thank you so much for the "exquisite"
Liz

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