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Just One Mile

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Marge Tindal
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Just One Mile
~Marge Tindal~

He whined that the world was out to get him.
He moaned, he groaned and he bitched.
I was among those who tired real quick of him
and tried to give him the ditch.

Through life he walked and complained.
It was one thing after another.
The hardships he'd borne,
the shoes he'd worn ...
one thing after another,
after another,
after another.

Behind his back we often scoffed,
to his face we did the same.
No matter that he walked away
from the taunt of our refrain.

The day came when his step slowed.
He sat on a bench with much pain.
He gestured me to join him.
I drew close as he tried to explain.

Son, take these shoes from my wearied feet,
place them on yours, my path to repeat.
Walk a mile in my shoes,
then tell me why,
if you can ,
they've always,
always
hurt my feet.

When you've traversed the roads I've traveled,
the indifference you'll see I've endured.
Walk just one mile in my shoes,
before you close my door.

I put those shoes on my feet.
I stood and began the trek.
In shoes I didn't know existed
I saw tears from a different view
as my eyes were now misted.

Walking just one mile in his shoes,
I saw
the rebuke,
the indifference,
the blame.
I hate to admit it now,
but, more than once,
I was cause of his blisters.
I hang my head in shame.




 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

© Copyright 2000 Marge Tindal - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
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1 posted 01-25-2000 07:57 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Oh Marge, this is so beautiful. It should be hung in every home and every public building.This is so beautifully written. Your talents are overwhelming
Liz
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2 posted 01-25-2000 08:06 AM       View Profile for Bad Boy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bad Boy

This is the best of the new day Marge.
This is something that happens alot in the world today.
Thank you for sharing this piece this morning Marge.

P.S.Could you give TOE some pointers?
lol

j.k.


 The Devil Made Me Do It.

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3 posted 01-25-2000 09:52 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Powerful poem, Marge... well done!!
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This is a terrific and thoughtful piece of work Marge.  Great job!  

fh
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5 posted 01-25-2000 10:40 AM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Marge...very thought provoking. It seems that we all know someone we scoff at but at the same time we could be those being scoffed at. Very well written from another's pov.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

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6 posted 01-25-2000 10:46 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Wow Marge! Ya mean he gave ya the shoes for free?......

This is superb sweets.....I think you get better every day.
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7 posted 01-25-2000 10:56 AM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spiked

Well done marge.
as said before extremly thought provoking.
Well enjoyed

Richard
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Enjoyed the new spin on an old saying...very well done, Marge!

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


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9 posted 01-25-2000 11:38 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wise words from a wise heart! Beautiful, Marge!  

Denise
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Marge--You have created a very thought provoking poem here.  Very well done!
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Where to Start

*If I live in a house of spotless beauty with everything in its place then I find little gratitude for my duty though my curtains are dressed in lace if I only have time for waxing and polishing my friends will learn of cleanliness love leaves the dust in search of a persons laughter love smiles at the fingerprints on the fresh cleaned window sash love wipes away the tears before it wipes the spilled mess love is the key that opens a message to a personís heart and always blesses and forgives the rest is history but I know not where to start.* (unknown)

lucky

 
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Beautiful! This one makes you stop & think before you speak. Nicely done.
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Elizabeth, my friend-
I do thank you from my heart for this lovely compliment on my writing.  

Suthern-
Thank you so much.

Fred Hobbs-
I'm really glad that you enjoyed it.

Wild Child-
Thanks, hon.  We should all try on another's
shoes from time to time.  

Toe-
Thank you for the ultimate compliment.
And you *rascal* ... ain't nuthin' in life free !  The price of bandaids to cover the blisters is awfully expensive !  

Richard-
If I provoked any thought ... then I did what I set out to do.  Thank you.

Sunshine-
Thanks for liking the spin.

Denise-
Thanks to you.
You're always here.  I like that.

Martie-
I'm glad that so many found it thought-provoking.  That was my intent, indeed.

Lucky-
That is a beautiful reply.
I guess we really do know that the starting place is within ourselves.
Thank you for sharing that.

Deb Lynne-
Yes, I guess the age-old axiom,
'actions speak louder than words'
would be appropriate here.
Thank you.
~*Marge*~



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14 posted 01-25-2000 11:22 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Excellent poem, Marge. This poem speaks much truth, as you well know. I'd walk a mile in your mocassins  
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To you dearest Marge
The piece you've done I am I awe
Can't still believe what I saw
The words you inked are so true
I don't know what to say to you
Seldom do I lose my way
Excellent, Beautiful, Brilliant....is not enough to say


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Marge Tindal
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Balladeer-

Thanks.  
Quietly my mocassins would take you
on trips of a different view.
I'd enjoy walking in your shoes too.

Helmut Becker-
You found just the right words
to make me feel really good about
this piece.
Thank you, my friend.

~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Applauding fervently!!!! WOnderful work Marge...you've taught us all a lesson in this piece  
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18 posted 01-26-2000 03:56 PM       View Profile for SnglDad   Email SnglDad   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SnglDad

Inappropriate comment

[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 01-26-2000).]
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19 posted 01-26-2000 04:47 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

SnglDad: Apparently you're the only one offended by Marge's writing... but your comments will offend many... including me.
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Thought provoking...definetly!
Wonderful piece Marge...and the last
two lines....powerful!!

I haven't been around much lately...so I don't understand what's with SngDad...but, I think his comments would be better left unsaid...aarrgh...

[This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 01-26-2000).]
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SnglDad..... I can't believe you! If you don't have sometning nice to say- keep your big mouth shut!

Marge, this for some reason, made me think of my Dad, I always thought he was so wrong on so many things.....the older I got, the more I realized I am now walking in my Dad's shoes with my kids. These shoes are killin me! My parents wished for me to have kids "just like me" - I now have 3.   -SEA
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Marge, your poem is excellent.

Although we are all entitled to our opinion, rudeness is not necessary. Since Sngl Dad has removed his email address, this will have to be said publicly.

If you read our Guidelines, you will find this:

Before posting a reply, take a moment to think: Will the writer be hurt if you 'slam' his or her writing? If you are angry, perhaps it's not a good time to respond.


Above all - and this is perhaps the only non-negotiable rule you'll find at Passions - do not attack the person because you find their words disagreeable. If you absolutely must express your opinion, confine it to the content of the post. Doing otherwise will only insure your reply is quickly deleted by a Moderator


You can be critical of the poem, but do not use rudeness and personal attacks on the poet to make a point. This is not acceptable behavior.
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First - Marge, you've written a great spinoff of an old adage.... I enjoyed reading it, as it made me think of the many years of "non" communication I've had with my own father... Looking at things from his perspective puts a whole new light on things...

Secondly - SnglDad - Kindly recall our Forum Guidelines.  If you don't like a poem, feel free to say so, respectfully... Direct slams on our authors, however, are not acceptable here at Passions.  They are both inappropriate and in poor taste.  Please refrain from such diatribe in your future comments on these boards.  Thank you
Nancy
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Divine One and Miss Nancy... a great big curtsy in gratitude. *S*
 
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