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Alone I

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Nicole
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0 posted 01-25-2000 02:01 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Nicole

Frustration courts my spirit’s consternation
Eliciting ever familiar dismay’s desperation

Caused by our soul’s constant disjunction
Bleeding me upon the thorns of compunction

The heart – from emotions – you silently eviscerate
Goal’s intent upon solely to exacerbate

Celebration’s glee goads you to immolate
The beating prize my walls sought to isolate

So due to my nature’s undying skepticism
Alone – I stand – behind my veil of stoicism



 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown
© Copyright 2000 Nicole Adams - All Rights Reserved
One Who Understands
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1 posted 01-25-2000 02:06 AM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

I enjoyed this clear and wonderful poem very much
tracie66
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2 posted 01-25-2000 02:59 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

I to enjoyed this very much...tracie
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3 posted 01-25-2000 06:42 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Very well done!!! *S*
Poet deVine
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4 posted 01-25-2000 08:40 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Satiate, this is wonderful. Your message is loud and clear! I like!  
Denise
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5 posted 01-25-2000 12:45 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is wonderful, Satiate! Superb writing!

Denise
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6 posted 01-25-2000 02:23 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

This made me grab for my dictionary, but now that I understand every word of it, I can only say....great writing Satiate !  
Nicole
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7 posted 01-26-2000 12:25 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

Thanks all!  

 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown
Meadowmuse
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8 posted 01-26-2000 07:09 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Satiate, I enjoyed this, and the suffix play was interesting.

Claire
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9 posted 01-26-2000 07:52 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

N - I like this - it is strong and clear and intelligently written. Well done!

K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
Skyfyre
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10 posted 01-26-2000 11:28 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

I know these sentiments well, Nicole ... brilliantly written, your character shines in this.

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

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11 posted 01-26-2000 11:31 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

You said a mouthful here, Satiate, and you said it very well.
G. A. Webb
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12 posted 01-26-2000 11:57 PM       View Profile for G. A. Webb   Email G. A. Webb   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for G. A. Webb

This is a very interesting piece. I found myself reading it more than once and coming up with more than one meaning. Well written.

G
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13 posted 01-27-2000 12:58 AM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Satiate, another fine job of rendering Inspiration's quiet whispering into a well-written medium.  Not only is this piece educational, as can be seen from the various replies you've received, but also well-balanced.  You've stated your theme succintly.  Some would say that such terse verse is harder to write than say a longish ode, and in many ways, they would be right.  Again, wonderful job, and keep em coming.  

Alicat

 As I sit here dimly thinking
Watching modem lights a-blinking
Churning out poetic hash.
Lord, in all Your piety,
Help me keep my sanity:
Please don't let the modem crash! --Alicat

One Who Understands
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14 posted 01-27-2000 01:05 AM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

If I knew what half those words meant, Im sure I'd be saying how beautiful and amaizing and excellent it was
hoot_owl_rn
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*gets out her dictionary, fumbles through the pages* Ah...okay   Nicely written and man would I love to have a vocabulary like that. I reamin the poor simpilton here...oh well  
Nicole
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16 posted 01-27-2000 01:08 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

Claire - Thank you, I enjoyed toying w/ the different words to use.

K - Why thank you m'friend!  

Kess - Thank you dear Lady, your compliment means much! (lol, and your understanding!)  

'Deer - (blushing) Thank you - a well done coming from a poet such as yourself leaves me quite honored.  

G.A. -   Thanks!  I'm very glad you saw more than one meaning.

Ali - Why thankee, kind sir

OWU -   Thank you!

Ruth -   (laughing) Thank you.  I had to use the dictionary a couple times myself writing this one...but shhhh...don't tell, k?


 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


17 posted 01-28-2000 05:13 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Despite a darkened veil, you shine brightly. In your poetry, in your friendship, you are a star burning intensly!

Awesome!
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