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Love Hurts.......a Villanelle.

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Travis
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0 posted 01-24-2000 10:29 PM       View Profile for Travis   Email Travis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Travis's Home Page   View IP for Travis

Love Hurts


You wonder why my heart hurts me so,
Why all that is within me has died.
And you wonder why I canít let go.

There are many things you just donít know,
So many times Iíve been cast aside.
You wonder why my heart hurts me so.

My life has been at an all time low.
It seems as if every love has lied.
And you wonder why I canít let go.

Tales of love I can simply forgo.
Love hurts,  as I have often implied
You wonder why my heart hurts me so.

As love runs from me, my heart in tow,
My body weeps, my soul torn inside.
And you wonder why I canít let go.

Ask me to love?  The answer is ďnoĒ
Too many nights I have sat and cried.
You wonder why my heart hurts me so
And you wonder why I canít let go.


Robert Harden

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Travis
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1 posted 01-24-2000 10:33 PM       View Profile for Travis   Email Travis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Travis's Home Page   View IP for Travis

I posted this villanelle poem yesterday.  It was my first attempt at this poetry style.  With Beki's help, she critiqued the original, and helped me understand the style more fully.  At any rate, I just wanted to re-post this poem with the revisions.  It was a difficult and satisfying challenge.  I hope you enjoy.  Beki, thank you.
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This is a wonderful villanelle, Travis! I enjoyed this version as well!

Denise  
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I think the changes help it flow more easily...but the content remains superb!
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