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Kevin
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0 posted 2000-01-24 05:39 PM


Somewhat lost, and long misguided
weary traveler stops to rest
many miles and fears subsided
many stories since confessed.

a glance upon the road behind
brings comfort that as soon departs
a road that wasn’t very kind
a road that broke so many hearts

and traveler with eyes still gleaming
holding on, but begging sleep
offered up the chance for dreaming
into worlds of conscience deep

weary traveler resting soundly
’neath the shelter of a tree
basks within his thoughts profoundly
feeding fruits of memory

Paths that he had come across
people that had shared their grace
dice that he had come to toss
challenges he had to face

love that he had took for granted
times that he had long forgot
imaginations he enchanted
imaginations he did not

miles of footprints in the road
brought back in the travelers mind
years of honors long bestowed
years of life he left behind

weary traveler eyes now glowing
wonders what he’s resting for
and with wind at his back blowing
traveler moves on once more.

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SEA
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1 posted 2000-01-24 05:55 PM


Kevin, this is so great! I feel like going for a trek now!   -SEA
Wendy Flora
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2 posted 2000-01-24 05:55 PM


What a beautiful metaphor for life... beautiful and tragic, maybe the more beautiful for its tragedy.  Bravo! -wen

 "Well she wants to live her life,
then she thinks about her life...
Pulls her hair back as she screams,
I don't really want to live this life!"
-Train "Meet Virginia"

Danny Holloway
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3 posted 2000-01-24 06:01 PM


Well done!  Your words convey the traveling experience wonderfully, been there a time or two.
DH

 

Denise
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4 posted 2000-01-24 06:10 PM


You painted the picture in my mind so vividly, Kevin, wonderful tale.  

Denise

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5 posted 2000-01-24 06:25 PM


Kevin, this is VERY excellent. Great thoughts and presented very well. Your talent is expanding very nicely...
Kevin
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6 posted 2000-01-24 10:34 PM


haha sea, who says you arent on one =)

Wendy, sometimes we need to ind the beauty in tragedy

Danny, where did you end up ?

D, a dreamers pallete? =)

Deer, you can only hope to contain me mwahaha =)

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7 posted 2000-01-24 10:38 PM


Excellent poetry Kevin!
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