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The Snowflake

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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 01-24-2000 11:12 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

The Snowflake


So high am I

Floating
and falling
in my princess petticoat
of lacy white

a fragile piece
of ice crystal

weaving the lace as I fall

downward floating
blowing....swirling....tumbling

ever weaving
ever forming
patterns of
symmetrical crystal

in perfect architecture

lightly falling fast
unable to see
my destination

whisked by the wind
one among millions
of princess petticoats

all falling

and we will land together
one on top the other
and cover the landscape
with a blanket
of white lacy layers
of crystal flakes

Then suddenly
I land,
earthed on the woolen sleeve
of a little girl

she looks down at me
in wonder
and amazement

then raises her sleeve
close to her smiling eye

and whispers

how beautiful....how beautiful
how beautiful you are!

in that exquisite moment
in that short, short

fraction of a moment

I show my crystal splendor
a discovery of wondrous beauty

a single flashing moment
that will long remain in her
memory

a magnificence
small
but unequaled by
anything on earth

and she sighs

wanting to hold me there
forever

as I quickly
melt
into a little drop
of
fallen water

Elizabeth Santos




[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 01-24-2000).]
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WhtDove
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1 posted 01-24-2000 11:25 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Liz this was beautiful! I'm sorry to put this here for you but I wanted you to see it!
My mom (sandgrain) and my dad left me this message for you today.
God knows our needs, please tell your friend we will pray
for her husband and also inform her about b-17 ..
documentation  
http://www.apricotsfromgod.com/journal.htm

Please Liz, check into this, it is apricot seeds. My dad was diagnosed with cancer of the bladder, he started to take these and there hasn't been a sign of it since. Please go to this web site and read up on it. There is hope in this I promise and I had forgotten all about it! Please hurry!



[This message has been edited by WhtDove (edited 01-24-2000).]
Denise
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2 posted 01-24-2000 11:26 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Oh, this is beautiful, Elizabeth! This made me think of just such a moment from my childhood! I thought I was the only one who got lost in the intricacy of a snowflake.

Denise
Pepper
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3 posted 01-24-2000 11:37 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Ahhh...exquisite Liz....
hoot_owl_rn
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Oh Liz...what wonderful free verse this is, it flows so smoothly to the end  )
spiked
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5 posted 01-24-2000 12:02 PM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spiked

being from the south snow is very rarely seen but you have done a woderful job of capturing it.
Thanks
Richard
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6 posted 01-24-2000 01:55 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

From "princess petticoats" which gives delight
to apricot seeds, thus God's fine insight
in giving Elizabeth for what she prays
in this and every single day.

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


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7 posted 01-24-2000 02:06 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

This poem rests lightly... as much of a delight as the snowflake it describes. *G* Beautiful!
Elizabeth Santos
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8 posted 01-24-2000 02:06 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Thank you whtdove for the site. I have already printed it our.
Thank all of you for your comments, this poem was a little therapy for the mind, it helps to keep writing and posting when possible.
Liz
Martie
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Wonderful free verse Liz, and the thought that sometimes one small moment gives importance to this great big universe of time.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
LngJhnAg
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10 posted 01-24-2000 02:15 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Lizzie

Yanno, you were very wise to select a little girl's sleeve on which to alight.  If old Toe had been your final destination, that scalawag's beer-laden breath woulda pulverized you before the first word - lol.

This is an unusual poem - first person snowflake.  Origianl to say the least.

I hope everything works out on your home front.
Marge Tindal
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11 posted 01-24-2000 02:18 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Oh, Elizabeth-

This is truly 'one of a kind'.
Like the snowflake, it drifts gently
through the mind ... resting for a
beautiful moment in my heart.

How lovely.  
How therapeutic the poetry of our soul
can be.
Thank you for this exquisite beauty.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Gene
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Wow! To see such wonders in a snowflake. I know. I work with very small things. There's an entire world within. Try looking at a snowflake under a microscope before it melts.

Love this poem. it reminds me of what William Blake saw in a grain of sand.
JOY 14
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13 posted 01-24-2000 06:34 PM       View Profile for JOY 14   Email JOY 14   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JOY 14's Home Page   View IP for JOY 14

I love snowflakes; they are so unique, each different like people.


 Joy

"To you, my children, These lovely flowers I give.
Prune ye my vines and fig trees,
With care my flowerets tend,
But keep the pathway open,
Your home is at the end."

-Robert Frost
(from: God's Garden)

 
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