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fc
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0 posted 01-24-2000 11:00 AM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for fc



her fingers
tired of composing
the too many paper teardrops
needed to cleanse the ache that
had sprung from far deeper
than she really cared to know
and she felt over exposed
and slightly chilled
at the abandoning
of so many
emotions,
so many
tears
and so she slipped back into her jacket
stuck her hands deep into the pockets
and as she walked away thought,
I should have known better
my hands always hurt
when they
get cold






this will be my last one, *she says with a sigh and soft smile* thanks all for your help and support


[This message has been edited by fc (edited 01-24-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 fc - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 01-24-2000 11:32 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wow...this is an incredible piece of poetry  
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2 posted 01-24-2000 02:27 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

This would be powerful even without the teardrop shaped verse. *S* I hope those abandoned emotions left spaces to be filled joy so great all aches will be forgotten!
fc
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3 posted 01-24-2000 04:23 PM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fc

thanks both of you, your comments mean much to me  
RainbowGirl
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4 posted 01-24-2000 05:10 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

The teardrop cleanses as it falls
but still it leaves a stain
emotion behind the built up wall
free-falling
haphazardly
splashing
freeing you from pain

HUSG


 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.

fc
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5 posted 01-24-2000 06:18 PM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fc

very well put RG, but what to do behind the wall when the rain ends?.....sigh....would almost rather cry than not be able to
hugs and love
JOY 14
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6 posted 01-24-2000 06:22 PM       View Profile for JOY 14   Email JOY 14   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JOY 14's Home Page   View IP for JOY 14

Such a wonderful piece, fc!

 Joy

"To you, my children, These lovely flowers I give.
Prune ye my vines and fig trees,
With care my flowerets tend,
But keep the pathway open,
Your home is at the end."

-Robert Frost
(from: God's Garden)

fc
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7 posted 01-24-2000 06:50 PM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fc

thanks joy and thanks all....


fc bids adieu
JTF
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8 posted 01-26-2000 05:30 AM       View Profile for JTF   Email JTF   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for JTF

I couldn't let fc go without a farewell ... you left beautiful and deep footprints in this forum fc ... I pray your path will lead towards a better future.

HUSG
Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 01-26-2000 06:58 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Very, very beautiful, indeed.
What a joy to read
LIz
Toerag
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10 posted 01-26-2000 07:40 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

What ya mean ya "bid adieu?"....Get your sweet ass back here young lady...Now, if you've got a hair appointment or something....sure, I know in your case that could take a very long time...but after that?....Yea, you better be back or I'll flood your email with nasty, naughty panting and breathing and nekkid pictures of LongJohn and all the other terrible things I can think of....do you hear me lady!!!??
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11 posted 01-26-2000 07:55 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

FC-
This is truly a wonderful, artistically presented work of art.
The words are delicate morsels
to be savored and then to have it
served it in such a lovely ~crystal dish~
is the creme de la creme.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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simplyYRREHS
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12 posted 01-26-2000 08:16 AM       View Profile for simplyYRREHS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for simplyYRREHS

oh, FC....this is beautifully tragic...you are so talented, I hope you will be gracing our "pages" again real soon.



 "The finest qualities of our nature, like the bloom on fruits, can be preserved only by the most delicate handling. Yet, we do not treat ourselves nor another thus tenderly." ~Henry David Thoreau

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