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In the Moonlight, Shadows Dancing

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Meadowmuse
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0 posted 01-24-2000 09:21 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse



In the Moonlight, Shadows Dancing



In the moonlight, shadows dancing
against the dampened pane
listening, living, within your breathing,
each breath a tortured strain.

Thinking on the lives below us
just there, upon the street
in the darkened evening's chorus
Hear God's merciful retreat.

What of the times we've been among them?
Busily moving in heartful haste
and now, as precious beats remind us
not one moment was set to waste.

For just now, in shadows' dance with moon
and Earth's revolving race
do I love you more than the tenderest touch
or the most honoring embrace.

I love your wracked and crackling gasps
inflamed, of bitter blood
the stench of decay from within your lungs
I loathe and also love.

And now as time is edging nigh
and as our mortal endings start
in the moonlight, shadows dancing
Love, eternally, hold my heart.


Dear LadyClaire



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hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 01-24-2000 10:20 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wow...when I issued the challange, I never dreamed I'd get something this hauntingly dark out of it. Wow...what another twist to the line, thank you, wonderfully done and a fine response to the challange  
Meadowmuse
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2 posted 01-24-2000 10:42 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Thank you, Hoot Owl. You know, I really wasn't going for "dark" with this...guess it just came out that way. Losing a love is darkness, yes, but so much was light in the life we shared.

Dear LadyClaire


Denise
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3 posted 01-24-2000 10:51 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Love and devotion through all of life, the light and the dark is true love. To find such a love is the greatest gift we can possess in this life. This poem speaks that love and devotion. Well done, Claire.

Denise
WhtDove
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4 posted 01-24-2000 10:54 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Well done, funny how what comes out sometime isn't what we aiming for! Great job nontheless!

 <*\\\><
Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

Hallmark


Tara Simms
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5 posted 01-24-2000 10:55 AM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

Breathtaking! I could picture two people, who've shared a lifetime of love, trying to let go of each other. It made me think of my grandparents.  Grandpa has alzheimers and his wife has lung cancer.  Timeless tale of love!
Martie
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6 posted 01-24-2000 10:58 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Claire, you have touched my heart with the truth of your devotion and given me a glimse into your soul. This is sooo beautiful!
Parker
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7 posted 01-24-2000 02:29 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Claire, your words always amaze me. I just love this one too.

Parker
Meadowmuse
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Denise...thank you. Yes, light and dark must indeed abide together within a lifelong love.

WhtDove...thank you so much for reading. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Tara...yes, your grandparents, I'm sure,  would know a love like this. Thank you so for reading and responding.

Martie...thank you, Martie, for your kind thoughts here. So glad my poem touched your heart.

Parker...Thanks for reading and responding, and for such a generous response.

Claire
Echo Rhayne
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9 posted 01-24-2000 04:31 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Claire, my this is beautiful!!

 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*

Meadowmuse
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10 posted 01-24-2000 05:59 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Thank you, Echo. This challenge thingy is kind of fun, huh?  

Claire
Echo Rhayne
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11 posted 01-25-2000 02:05 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

It most certainly is, though I am kind of stuck on one right now LoL, but I'm getting there =)

 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*

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12 posted 01-25-2000 02:44 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Claire-
What a beautiful answer to the challenge.
Your love for your lost one just made
the moonbeams shine a little brighter.
~*~
~In The Moonlight Shadows Dancing~
~Sound of music from above~
~In The Moonlight Shadows Dancing~
~Returning thoughts of precious love~
~Dancing shadows on moonlight bear~
~Lovely memories that you shared~
~In The moonbeams shadows glancing~
~In the Moonlight Shadows Dancing~
~*~
~*~ Marge ~*~
~*~

Meadowmuse
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Echo...not to worry, I'm certain it will be as lovely as all the rest of your work!

Marge...what a wonderful verse you've written here, thank you! I enjoy spontanaeity, and yours is always grand!

Claire
Elizabeth Santos
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Claire,
You are an amazing poet. I pray your poet pen never stops flowing.
Liz
Meadowmuse
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Elizabeth...Thank you kindly, Madam, but I can assure you it is all done with spirit gum and mirrors.  

Take care,
Claire
 
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