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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 2000-01-24 07:30 AM


Ok Ruth, hope you don't mind, but I modified your phrase a tiny bit... I wanted to make it a Vilanelle, so I just took away one little bitty "s," to make it "shadow," instead of "shadows." Hope that doesn't disqualify me!!!  


Shadow-Dancing

In the moonlight, shadow-dancing
Faerie form cavorts upon the ground
With gait graceful, so entrancing.

Forever she sways, romancing.
Her hips seducing men, spellbound
In the moonlight, shadow-dancing.

Each night she spends a-prancing
Atop the prison where she’s bound
With gait graceful, so entrancing.

Yearning to break free and glancing
For love to join her, ever-bound
In the moonlight shadow-dancing.

So she spends her time a-chancing
Screaming her anguish with no sound
With gait graceful, so entrancing.

Until then, never advancing
She moves silently, flower-crowned
In the moonlight, shadow-dancing
With gait graceful, so entrancing.




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1 posted 2000-01-24 08:12 AM


Christopher

This is sheer beauty dancing.
Light, lilting and lovely.
What a pleasing poem to greet my morn.
Ahhhhhhhhh !
~*Marge*~


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Meadowmuse
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2 posted 2000-01-24 08:26 AM


Delicately crafted and poetically seductive, your faerie, shadow~dancing. Enjoyed this very much! (and a belated Happily Birthlday to you!)

Claire

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3 posted 2000-01-24 08:54 AM


Looks like a villanelle to me, sir ...  

And a good one too -- course you know you can never go wrong with me as long as you use "faeries" as your subject!  I agree with Marge, what a lovely way to wake up!  

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest


hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 2000-01-24 09:10 AM


Wow...a villanelle, and a great one to boot. Thanks Christopher, it's wonderful   Challange well met.
BTW...HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!!!

Poet deVine
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5 posted 2000-01-24 09:40 AM


This is superb! I know!  
Denise
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6 posted 2000-01-24 10:43 AM


Enchanting shadow dancing, Christopher! Simply beautiful!

Denise

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7 posted 2000-01-24 10:49 AM


Christopher your talent is endless! Excellent!
Marilyn
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8 posted 2000-01-24 10:13 PM


Wonderfully done Chris! I feel my own response to Hoot's challange pales compared to this.  
Martie
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9 posted 2000-01-24 10:20 PM


Very well done Christopher!  Excellent poetry!
devina
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10 posted 2000-01-24 10:59 PM


Beautiful, and a tad bit seductive dear, looks a challenge well met!!! So graceful doth your poetry flow

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Nicole
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11 posted 2000-01-25 12:20 PM


I have to agree w/ everyone else m'friend, this is beautiful - but hauntingly so...it made me sad, she's trapped and can't 'get out'...you write w/ eloquence m'dear, very much enjoyed the read.  

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Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

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12 posted 2000-01-25 12:25 PM


Wow I didn't think It could get any better than Ruth's...I stand corrected

(No offense of course Ruth )

Temptress
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13 posted 2000-01-25 11:15 PM


This had a great atmosphere of sensuality to it. I enjoyed reading it.  
Severn
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14 posted 2000-01-26 04:50 AM


I am impressed. An unusual take - and it works well.

K

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life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

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15 posted 2000-03-29 09:08 AM


Is there nothing you can't do. I never heard of this style before but I like it.
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16 posted 2004-06-06 01:57 PM


well done!
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