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suthern
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0 posted 01-24-2000 07:04 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for suthern

The sun creeps slowly through the sky
And warms the empty earth
But tires of this and so creates
The miracle of birth.

An ape-like creature moves along
Over the rocky land
Through ages this thing will become
The forerunner of man.

A man stands tall, his back not bent
Thoughts struggle in his mind
Trying to better understand
How emerged his own kind.

He seeks the answer in the stars
He seeks it under sea
But shuns the thought that a small ape
His ancestor might be.

The sun grows weary of this play
This arrogance of man
And grows much hotter day by day
Parching all of the land.

Man begs for mercy but the sun
Shines brighter on and on
Manís last shrill screams reverberate
Then all of man is gone.

The sun creeps slowly through the sky
And warms the empty earth
Regretting now the failure of
The miracle of birth.

© Copyright 2000 suthern - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 01-24-2000 07:08 AM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Wow what a concept.....But the death of another always bring the birth of the next.  Circle of life concept    Good writing and expression of thought

 
I don't buy temporary insanity as they murder defense. Because
people kill people. That's and animal instinct. I think breaking
into someone's home and ironing all their clothes is temporary
insanity.


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2 posted 01-24-2000 08:07 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

This is a wonderful piece Suthern I agree what a wonderful concept  
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3 posted 01-24-2000 08:33 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Chilling. Excellent.

Claire
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4 posted 01-24-2000 09:23 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Wow!...Excellent writing Suthern..

HUSG

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.

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5 posted 01-24-2000 09:31 AM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fc

you been doing some deep thinking girl?...really well written  
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6 posted 01-24-2000 09:36 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Thank you very much First_Knight, whiskey, Meadowmuse, RG, and fc. *S* No deep thinking lately, fc... this one is almost as old as I am! LOL
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7 posted 01-24-2000 09:43 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

You mean you were born thinking up verses like that....oh my...*g*

Sorry, couldn't resist...

HUSG

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.

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8 posted 01-24-2000 02:03 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Yep - just what I thought - this poem was originally written on clay tablets for Gilgamesh.  Neat theme, lil Belle.
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9 posted 01-24-2000 02:15 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Ahem, sailor!!! I'm not THAT old... unless memory has completely failed me! LOL
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10 posted 01-26-2000 09:35 AM       View Profile for JTF   Email JTF   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for JTF

Sorry Auntie but I can't resist ...  

SMOOCHES

ps : outstanding poem !!
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11 posted 01-26-2000 01:05 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Gee, Froggie... where were you when I needed a picture like that for my presentation? *G* And don't EVEN tell me you weren't born yet! LOL. Thanks!!!
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12 posted 01-26-2000 01:13 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

While I don't personally believe in evolution, I enjoyed your poem. Very clever and well written. -SEA
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13 posted 01-26-2000 01:40 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

SEA: Thanks... As I mentioned before, this one is very old... I picked the light, fluffy, flighty, mindless (HA!) topic "The creation and destination of man" for a project in high school... and... ever thorough... I explored all options. *G* Just be very grateful you can't hear the song I wrote... my poor classmates had to endure me singing it! LOL
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suthern..I'm right there with you on the singing......at birthdays I mouth the words! Ha HA   -SEA
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I haven't responded immediately to this poem for several reasons....First of all, as usual, the lady has unlimited talent, secondly, I don't want to seem biased as she is my best friend, and I don't feel as though I should comment immediately as I am probably biased,  but I believe in evolution and creation....science does prove evolution to an extent, and the Bible also (to me anyway), is pretty much concrete. Many scientists believe as I do...That truly we evolved from something....and that when "man" began to be able to "think" rationally that God indeed was for sure involved. If ya think about the miracle of life, the way things evolved....it took something much more than nature to make it come to what we are now. Of course, then again...I'm a damn Toerag yanno, and most of you know how my mind works, (or doesn't work) just quite right.  I truly believe in God, and too many things have been proven from the Bible for me not to believe...I don't believe everything mind you, I believe many things were written in the Bible to make a point..not to be taken literally....and no matter what anyone believes...ya gotta admit, the Ten Commandments are hard to disagree with, as are many other things that have been written. I've seen this poem from Suthern prior to it's posting here....and it's simply fantastic....Then there's that "missing link" thinggie..That's probably Balladeer and LongJohn.....but who am I to decide?..LOL
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16 posted 01-26-2000 02:46 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Toerag: Thanks, sweetie... Biased or not, your opinion means much to me! *S* (In fact, I'd say you're solely responsible for this being posted. LOL) And I like the way you think... especially when you're thinking "best friend" this way! *G* I'm most grateful. *S*

And ROFL @ missing link identification... *G*
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Excellent writing for sure! Awesome Suthern....I really enjoyed this read!!

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


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18 posted 01-26-2000 11:25 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Excellent poem, Suthern girl. Of course, anyone who has seen Toerag would have to know that we must have evolved from apes....and some haven't quite evolved yet!


(it was very clever to create your title from Toe's luck with women)

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19 posted 01-27-2000 07:01 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Thank you very much, Pepper!!! You've been greatly missed! *S*

And Bal... he's always got me (singing "you are my sunshine!") LOL
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WOW!!! need I say more?

 I can live with the idea
That we are merely actors
Playing a part
But I do wish
Whoever is writing my script
Would learn to use
A few more Happy Endings
~Javan
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21 posted 01-27-2000 01:53 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

An excellent work here.  I really enjoyed this one.  Thanks suthern  

Toe -- the bible doesn't have to be literally true to contain truth -- i think that's what you're saying -- i agree my friend.  

Sometimes there can be 'the truth' or 'a truth', but in the end there is 'truth'.

Since you guys are going deep you may find my "Invocation" in CA to be of interest...
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22 posted 01-27-2000 01:58 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I'll take a wow any day, Hoot... especially from you! Thanks! *G* And you too, LR... many thanks!
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23 posted 01-27-2000 03:36 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

I too believe in creation - for example, I believe that Toerag was created from discarded film canisters and spare camera parts.
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Very nicely done....
although.. shouldn't say this.. somewhat embarrassing...  but when I saw the title... was thinking of something else...
enjoyed the poem...
 
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