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Beki
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0 posted 2000-01-24 04:29 AM



Another from high school........

Forgive Me

I never meant to leave you
standing small
among the California pines,
but the wind was playing
in your hair
as if the whole world
could be found
on top of your golden head,
and I felt so insignificant
that even the winter pine cones
were greater than me.

© Copyright 2000 Rebecca Reese - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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1 posted 2000-01-24 08:01 AM


You wrote well even then, Beki... I wish I had started as a teenager...

Nice to see you again...

Beki
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2 posted 2000-01-24 02:08 PM


Thanks a bunch Nan...I have been writing my whole life, won my first contest when I was 11. And still, I have so much to learn  
Denise
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3 posted 2000-01-25 12:16 PM


This is lovely, too, Beki! It says so much with so few words!

Denise

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4 posted 2000-01-25 12:18 PM


Even when you realize that you have made a mistake, it feels good to be able to say it...
Paul Hoekman
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5 posted 2000-01-25 12:34 PM


D E E P

DEEP

deep

HelmutB
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6 posted 2000-01-25 06:35 AM


A nice poem you did. I know what it feels like to feel small and insignificant, you prosed this so well.

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


Beki
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7 posted 2000-01-25 05:21 PM


Thanks everyone, was a little hesitant to post such early work but I am glad I did...perhaps I will post a few more  
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