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Winterwarm (a villanelle....repost)

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Beki
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0 posted 01-24-2000 03:50 AM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Beki


Winterwarm
The hills are blanketed with snow,
The wild geese have all flown south.
Whisper your warmth across my mouth.

The woods breathe deep, and hold their breath,
The creeks and streams have ceased to flow;
The wild geese have all flown south.

I know a single winter truth
The hibernating creatures know -
Whisper your warmth across my mouth.

The trees stand tall and meet their death
While rabbits huddle close below;
The wild geese have all flown south.

You are the husband of my youth,
The only comfort that I seek now -
Whisper your warmth across my mouth.

The lake is frozen hard as truth,
The fish swim deep and sleep below.
The wild geese have all flown south,
Whisper your warmth across my mouth.

© Copyright 2000 Rebecca Reese - All Rights Reserved
Travis
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1 posted 01-24-2000 09:23 AM       View Profile for Travis   Email Travis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Travis's Home Page   View IP for Travis

Thanks for posting this for me to read, very nice, and a very difficult style to write.  Thats my opinion of course, I'm sure its much easier for others. lol.  

Travis
Beki
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My opinion , too, Travis..it IS a very difficult form to write...the hardest part being to find two lines that bear so much repeating...that truly are necessary to the poem beyond serving the form. This was my first, and actually my best in this form...and it took me almost a month to get it just right  )
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This is beautiful, Beki! Very lovely!

Denise
Beki
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Thank you Denise...
JennyLee
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5 posted 02-02-2000 01:16 PM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

Beautiful piece Beki..


I know a single winter truth
The hibernating creatures know -
Whisper your warmth across my mouth.

This passage is my favorite..You make it seem easy  

Jenny Lee  


[This message has been edited by JennyLee (edited 02-02-2000).]
 
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