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Winterwarm (a villanelle....repost)
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Winterwarm (a villanelle....repost) |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Winterwarm The hills are blanketed with snow, The wild geese have all flown south. Whisper your warmth across my mouth. The woods breathe deep, and hold their breath, The creeks and streams have ceased to flow; The wild geese have all flown south. I know a single winter truth The hibernating creatures know - Whisper your warmth across my mouth. The trees stand tall and meet their death While rabbits huddle close below; The wild geese have all flown south. You are the husband of my youth, The only comfort that I seek now - Whisper your warmth across my mouth. The lake is frozen hard as truth, The fish swim deep and sleep below. The wild geese have all flown south, Whisper your warmth across my mouth. |
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Travis Junior Member
since 1999-06-14
Posts 17 |
Thanks for posting this for me to read, very nice, and a very difficult style to write. Thats my opinion of course, I'm sure its much easier for others. lol. Travis |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
My opinion , too, Travis..it IS a very difficult form to write...the hardest part being to find two lines that bear so much repeating...that truly are necessary to the poem beyond serving the form. This was my first, and actually my best in this form...and it took me almost a month to get it just right  ) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful, Beki! Very lovely! Denise |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Thank you Denise...  |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Beautiful piece Beki.. I know a single winter truth The hibernating creatures know - Whisper your warmth across my mouth. This passage is my favorite..You make it seem easy  Jenny Lee [This message has been edited by JennyLee (edited 02-02-2000).] |
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