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Prime Directive Goal

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PhaerieChild
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0 posted 01-24-2000 03:13 AM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for PhaerieChild

Life is rushing by too fast, like a river that can't be tamed.
Time is flowing endlessly, faster to somewhere unnamed
Things that seemed so permanent are just dust in the wind
Monuments and moments lost in the distance, just around the bend.

People you knew you'd see tomorrow are just no longer there.
Life and death had their duel and left nothing but a vacant stare.
Love you knew would be there even after a nasty fight
Has just vanished in a twinkling of a shattered headlight.

Cancer came a calling and took the body of your soul
Ravaging every cell with death, its prime directive goal.
Memories abound with laughter, joy, and then the grief
How this happened, leaves an emptiness beyond belief.

When in younger days, it seemed you were indestructible
Capable of leaping tall buildings, absolutely invincible.
The duel, it rages on, marching toward its inevitable end
Beginning at birth, destined to die, to leave without intent.

To know that the end is near, today, tomorrow, or later
Is all that we have been given by our Heavenly Creator.
He loves our hearts, knows our minds, gave each of us a soul
He died for us and loves us all. It is His Prime Directive Goal.

He knows that we'll saddened by every loss we have to face
But He is there to hold us up and keep us within His Grace.
He gave his Son so we may live, eternally on celestial shores.
Could we be so unselfish? Could any of us do that or more?


By Shawna R Holder
Magnolia Manor  1/24/2000


 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho




[This message has been edited by WildChild (edited 01-24-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Shawna R. Holder - All Rights Reserved
Beki
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1 posted 01-24-2000 03:29 AM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

This poem is full of passion and yet a tremendous sense of loss, but still hopeful. Well done. Just a couple minor editing things...in the third line of first stanza should read "Things that seemed so permanent ARE just dust..." (things requires plural verb).....

also, in the second line of the third stanza, it should read "Ravaging every cell with death, ITS prime directive goal." (no apostrophe on its...apostrophe would make it contraction "it is" rather than possessive you wanted)

A couple lines I really like....
"Monuments and moments lost in the distance, just around the bend"  and
"To know that the end is near, today, tomorrow, or later
Is all that we have been given by our Heavenly Creator."   GOOD WORK!
PhaerieChild
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2 posted 01-24-2000 03:35 AM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Beki, thanks for the editing tips. I thought I had all that worked out but I guess not. Anyway I went back and fixed them. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho


hoot_owl_rn
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This tells a good story  
Denise
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4 posted 01-24-2000 12:18 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

And peace only comes when we are foucused on His Prime Directive Goal...how easily we lose sight of it.....

Thanks for the reminder, Shawna!

Denise
PhaerieChild
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5 posted 01-25-2000 01:31 AM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Ruth, thank you

Denise,focusing on the goal....that's so hard to do sometimes but I think He knows that and forgives. Thanks for the reply.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho


 
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