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Pinnochio in Reverse................................#1
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Pinnochio in Reverse................................#1 |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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His life had been a routine chore That moved from day to day. No ups or downs there to be found. No blacks or whites - just gray. It wasn't that he didn't try. He did the best he could. At time he felt, instead of flesh, That he was made of wood. A puppet or a mannequin Instead of flesh and bone, He was the Beatles' 'Nowhere Man' Unwanted and alone. And then, one day - a startling fact! He'd told a little lie To gain attention and he felt A glimmer in his eye! He told another - felt the smile Grow wide from ear to ear. Another one! Importance always Lacking did appear. With each lie told, he felt alive. The admiration of The people he was lying to Caused him to feel love. "Forget it, world!", he cried. "I am not made of wood, but skin! No longer will you treat me like A helpless mannequin!" He wove a world of make-believe Complete with animations And built the past he never had Through his imagination. And so he sits, behind the screen, Behind his words of verse; Alive within his fantasy - Pinocchio in reverse. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wonderful !! Liz |
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tulip Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 320unknown |
I love it, Balladeer! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I love this deer--so amazing! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer- < !signature-->You are just awesome, sir. Oh, yeah .. and your poem is too.  By Jiminy Cricket ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com [This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 01-23-2000).] |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
And brought to life with your magic this time Balladeer. Well done sir I don't buy temporary insanity as they murder defense. Because people kill people. That's and animal instinct. I think breaking into someone's home and ironing all their clothes is temporary insanity. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful piece of writing, Balladeer! It is always a pleasure!  Denise |
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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas |
LOL...delightful, the meter staggered a time or two, but I'm glad ..it shows that you are human. wonderful. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Wonderful! Original! |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
But does he have strings to hold him down, to make him fret, to make him frown? hehe thanks for the smile (and no you cant have it back )Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This was very good Deer, makes me wonder what your brewing up for part two!!  Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
This is just a regular old poem for him yanno?....Sure, it's great....superbly written, and all the other great stuff his work usually is.....and it sounds like it's from "experience" too?....Now take a look at his picture up there....check out that "beak"....... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Is that a cute little button nose we see? *G* Well done, Balladeer... enjoyed the read! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Bal: Oh, poor Pinnochio...but I have a vision of a cute little twinkle in his eyes though...*g* HUSG Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
EXCELLENT!!!! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Very excellant work, I loved it, great flow. Parker |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
again you make me *see*, I always view my time online as the time I can be *me* and wondered about those who make up lies... great work |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
A very neat reversal, and a real temptation to think, darn it! |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
great poem Nice story |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
A story you have there foretold Heart out of wood his soul so cold You didn't speak about his nose that growed...for every lie he told I wonder why, but I let it go After all i know some in flesh, they are like Pinocchio. You're poem indeed is very good For just a piece of wood  < !signature--> The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. [This message has been edited by HelmutB (edited 01-24-2000).] |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
'Deer Where do you get all these ideas??? This is another classic. |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Hey Balladeer It has been a while since I have been on here but it is nice to see that some things do not change. You are still supplying great poetry. Jfreak |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
My warm thanks to you all. Love your cricket, Marge!! Hey, jfreak!! Welcome back!! Great to see you again! |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Balladeer, Another tale well told and rhymed perfectly. Great idea for a poem! fh |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
Balladeer, you never fall short of pure and true perfection |
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