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Pinnochio in Reverse................................#1

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Balladeer
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0 posted 01-23-2000 11:13 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer


His life had been a routine chore
That moved from day to day.
No ups or downs there to be found.
No blacks or whites - just gray.

It wasn't that he didn't try.
He did the best he could.
At time he felt, instead of flesh,
That he was made of wood.

A puppet or a mannequin
Instead of flesh and bone,
He was the Beatles' 'Nowhere Man'
Unwanted and alone.

And then, one day - a startling fact!
He'd told a little lie
To gain attention and he felt
A glimmer in his eye!

He told another - felt the smile
Grow wide from ear to ear.
Another one! Importance always
Lacking did appear.

With each lie told, he felt alive.
The admiration of
The people he was lying to
Caused him to feel love.

"Forget it, world!", he cried.
"I am not made of wood, but skin!
No longer will you treat me like
A helpless mannequin!"

He wove a world of make-believe
Complete with animations
And built the past he never had
Through his imagination.

And so he sits, behind the screen,
Behind his words of verse;
Alive within his fantasy -
Pinocchio in reverse.
© Copyright 2000 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
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1 posted 01-23-2000 11:18 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Wonderful !!
Liz
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I love it, Balladeer!
Martie
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3 posted 01-23-2000 11:22 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I love this deer--so amazing!
Marge Tindal
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4 posted 01-23-2000 11:36 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Balladeer-
You are just awesome, sir.
Oh, yeah .. and your poem is too.
By Jiminy Cricket !
~*Marge*~



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[This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 01-23-2000).]
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5 posted 01-23-2000 11:38 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

And brought to life with your magic this time Balladeer.  Well done sir

 
I don't buy temporary insanity as they murder defense. Because
people kill people. That's and animal instinct. I think breaking
into someone's home and ironing all their clothes is temporary
insanity.


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6 posted 01-23-2000 11:43 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wonderful piece of writing, Balladeer! It is always a pleasure!    

Denise
John Yaws
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7 posted 01-24-2000 12:10 AM       View Profile for John Yaws   Email John Yaws   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit John Yaws's Home Page   View IP for John Yaws

LOL...delightful, the meter staggered a time or two, but I'm glad ..it shows that you are human. wonderful.
WhtDove
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8 posted 01-24-2000 12:47 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Wonderful! Original!
Echo Rhayne
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9 posted 01-24-2000 01:57 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

But does he have strings to hold him down, to make him fret, to make him frown? hehe  thanks for the smile (and no you cant have it back  )

 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*

devina
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This was very good Deer, makes me wonder what your brewing up for part two!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Toerag
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11 posted 01-24-2000 06:41 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

This is just a regular old poem for him yanno?....Sure, it's great....superbly written, and all the other great stuff his work usually is.....and it sounds like it's from "experience" too?....Now take a look at his picture up there....check out that "beak".......
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12 posted 01-24-2000 06:53 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Is that a cute little button nose we see? *G* Well done, Balladeer... enjoyed the read!
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13 posted 01-24-2000 09:51 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Bal: Oh, poor Pinnochio...but I have a vision of a cute little twinkle in his eyes though...*g*

HUSG

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.

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EXCELLENT!!!!
Parker
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15 posted 01-24-2000 11:23 AM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Very excellant work, I loved it, great flow.

Parker
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16 posted 01-24-2000 12:00 PM       View Profile for fc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fc

again you make me *see*, I always view my time online as the time I can be *me* and wondered about those who make up lies...
great work  
Ted Reynolds
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17 posted 01-24-2000 12:14 PM       View Profile for Ted Reynolds   Email Ted Reynolds   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ted Reynolds

A very neat reversal, and a real temptation to think, darn it!
spiked
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18 posted 01-24-2000 12:55 PM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spiked

great poem
Nice story
HelmutB
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19 posted 01-24-2000 01:14 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

A story you have there foretold
Heart out of wood his soul so cold
You didn't speak about his nose that growed...for every lie he told
I wonder why, but I let it go
After all i know some in flesh, they are like Pinocchio.
You're poem indeed is very good
For just a piece of wood



 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.  



[This message has been edited by HelmutB (edited 01-24-2000).]
LngJhnAg
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20 posted 01-24-2000 01:55 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

'Deer

Where do you get all these ideas???  This is another classic.
jfreak
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21 posted 01-24-2000 02:04 PM       View Profile for jfreak   Email jfreak   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jfreak

Hey Balladeer

It has been a while since I have been on here but it is nice to see that some things do not change.  You are still supplying great poetry.

Jfreak
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22 posted 01-24-2000 05:47 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

My warm thanks to you all.
Love your cricket, Marge!!

Hey, jfreak!! Welcome back!! Great to see you again!
Fred Hobbs
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23 posted 01-24-2000 08:47 PM       View Profile for Fred Hobbs   Email Fred Hobbs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Fred Hobbs's Home Page   View IP for Fred Hobbs

Balladeer,

Another tale well told and rhymed perfectly.  Great idea for a poem!

fh
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Balladeer, you never fall short of pure and true perfection
 
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