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My First Poem -- Things at Last

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Gene
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0 posted 01-23-2000 09:25 PM       View Profile for Gene   Email Gene   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Gene's Home Page   View IP for Gene

This is my first poem. I just hope this doesn't seem childish. I have no background in poetry, so please understand that I know nothing about correct formatting or punctuation (need a lot of help there). I just want to know if I have any talent for this or if I'm just hallucinating. I wrote this last night.
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"Things at Last"

There are things Iíve yet remembered,
Places that Iíve been before.
Faces seem familiar,
But people have changed,
Theyíre here no more.

For, there is no Present
There is no Past,
But only the becoming
Of Things at Last.

There are times,
That seem to pass me by.
I canít recall,
I donít know why.

For, there is no Present
There is no Past,
But only the becoming
Of Things at Last.

But now it seems so clear to me,
The present is the future of the past.
And the Future is those Things at Last.

For, there is no Present
There is no Past,
Lest I forget to remember,
Those Things at Last.
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Thanks,
Gene


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1 posted 01-23-2000 09:39 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Gene-
Surely you jest !
Hallucinating? NOT !

Welcome again to the hearth of this
family of friends.
Thanks for the log you've added to
the poet's fire.

The poem is very well done.
'The present is the future of the past'.
Took me a minute .... but I got it !
Very thought-provoking indeed.
~*Marge*~



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2 posted 01-23-2000 09:43 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wow! What a beautiful, delightful poem! Welcome to Passions, Gene! Check your email for a special welcome!    

Denise
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3 posted 01-23-2000 09:44 PM       View Profile for simplyYRREHS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for simplyYRREHS

Musical, Gene, completely musical!  A much better entrance into the forum.  Far from hallucinating...looking forward to reading more.


Sherry

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Gene
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4 posted 01-23-2000 10:19 PM       View Profile for Gene   Email Gene   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Gene's Home Page   View IP for Gene

Wow! Thanks all. I'm inspired.  

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Gene
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5 posted 01-24-2000 01:45 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Eugene, I think that this is a great poem, and I am glad you decided to post it here for all of us to read and share in its beauty!  

 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*

devina
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6 posted 01-24-2000 01:50 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

I can say that you're definantly NOT hallucinating..I remember my first poem- way back when, and I'm sure it wasn't this good.  Your format and rhyme is very good- And you call yourself a beginner????   Welcome to passions!!!

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Gene
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7 posted 01-24-2000 12:46 PM       View Profile for Gene   Email Gene   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Gene's Home Page   View IP for Gene

Thanks again.

I just wanted to say, that I really appreciate this forum and all of you for your wonderful thoughts and poems. You don't know how much they mean to me.

I'm stuck in a very high-tech job. Don't get me wrong, I love what I do, but everyone I work with are scientists or engineers. They do great things, but sometimes can't see the forrest for the trees. If they knew that I'm writing poetry, they'd think I've gone off the deep end--they'd never let me live it down.

I've always been more the "artsy" type, so it's nice to be able to take a relective break and come to a place where my thoughts are welcomed. I find this very therepeutic.  

I hope I can continue to think of new poems. Whenever I do, I'll be sure to post them here.

Thanks so much,
Gene  
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8 posted 01-24-2000 04:49 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Gene, Its a wonderful poem, a great first start, you are a natural. I'm also in a high tech job, and I show my poetry. I don't care what they think, cause they can't write poetry na na na na. ... Sorry slipped back into my childhood.

Oh yes, Welcome.

parker
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