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Beyond the door of metaphor
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Beyond the door of metaphor |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Beyond the door of metaphor I strolled amongst some old debris. And sat where used to be a tree. I stared into the misty air, But there was nothing really there. There was no house of warm appeal. Not even a tree of special feel. The lonely path showed lonely still. And the loneliness made me ill. But memories played the scene anew And time reeled back without a cue. Faces, moments, all were there. Every scene, a scene to stare. Who can view his life once more, Without the wish to change the core? But wishes cannot change the die, Of anything, that has gone bye. It's over now and I am here. And everything that I held dear, Is gone. The house, garden, the tree. And most the lonely path, to thee. Invisible, except, in metaphor. But God how clear I see that door. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy--you have managed to make my heart hurt with this one. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
*Sigh* Beautiful Sy ! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, If it managed to do that then it is good, thank you *L* Sy Munda, Thank you Munda, for the sigh. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, You have taken me back to a special time in your life, and have warmed my heart What a beautiful poem Love ya Liz |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I, too, have visions of the past Of kindly times that didn't last That tree, that house, familiar places In memories I see those faces Now misty-eyed for times gone bye I dwell there often with a sigh My heart near breaking to the core My lips are praying, 'just once more' Along that path where I could find The best of times that were so kind. Beautiful, heartbreaking poem, Seymour. Well done. Denise |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Would had I but known though lifes forces shown through yon past's door, I would not have flown so high, so long gone, but have lingered a little more. Thank you Sy. You have once again inspired me onward. Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour- A *sigh* wrung from within, Writ with poet's flowing pen. Looking twice through door of life .. longing to enter again. Knock Knock Who's there? Open door to life once more ~Marge~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
My, how you have grown in talent...wonderful, Sy! Just wonderful! |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Oh Sy....I love old places to sit and think. Your words weave so well together and bring the picture so clear. Thank you I don't buy temporary insanity as they murder defense. Because people kill people. That's and animal instinct. I think breaking into someone's home and ironing all their clothes is temporary insanity. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent writing, Sy. I peeked through door of metaphor But I just can't recall what for!  |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
This is going to sound insane, but I guess that goes with my whole image around here anyway ... *g* ...but this reminded me of a children's book that I still adore -- "The Giving Tree," by Shel Silverstein. A lovely story of unconditional love, and not knowing what you've got until it is gone ... This was truly moving, Sy -- if it tells you anything, I still cry when I read that book.  --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Thank you for the kind words. Love Sy Denise, What a wonderful poem in response, thank you so much. *L* Sy Sunshine, Beautiful response, loved your little poem. *L* Sy Marge, Enjoyed your comment so much, thank you. *L* Sy Poet deVine, You are one of my favorites, thank you so much. *L* Sy First, Wonderful comment, thank you. Balladeer, Excellent from you means much, thank you. Sy Sky, A lovely comment thank you. Sy |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
this gets a big WOW from me....loved it |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
And such a metaphor you've employed here. There is much to be said for resolve, but how difficult it can be, indeed. The lonely path has turned 'round and is once again a memory...so sad, and so well conveyed.  Claire |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
With your words you paint a wonderful picture. Love the vision you have installed in my minds eye Thanks Richard |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
I know I wrote this reply once before. But your poem made me do it. They say I'm a dreamer, but I'm not the only one. I can see the door your looking at oh so well, decribed through your words so real. The old dark wood I feel. So well, I want to knock. I'm running out of excellent, very good very nice, but you know I'm a fan of your poetry. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
fc, Thank you for the WOW. Meadow, A large thank you. Sy Spiked, Thank you for the very nice comment. Helmut, You are a good fan and I thank you for the warm words. |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Sy, This is excellent! You've managed to paint a haunting portrait here. |
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