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Dark Angel
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0 posted 01-23-2000 04:38 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dark Angel

Return to Me!!


You called to me
that night, that night,
when the stars were
shining ever bright
You called my name,
And you made
the wind blow
Wildly
through my hair
And you disturbed
the still air
Your voice, husky
Ringing
through my head
Are you ,
Could you be?
my loved one
Dead?


Dark Angel


 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


© Copyright 2000 Dark Angel - All Rights Reserved
devina
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1 posted 01-23-2000 05:30 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Full of yearning, I get the feeling that there's more to this one than you say!! Beautifuly written as always!

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Bad Boy
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2 posted 01-23-2000 05:56 AM       View Profile for Bad Boy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bad Boy

Im kinda lost on this one  
Im not sure if your talking about a loved one that has passed on or a love that`s gone sour?
Either way it`s well written.

  

[This message has been edited by Bad Boy (edited 01-23-2000).]
Poet deVine
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3 posted 01-23-2000 10:54 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Wonderful..so haunting!  
Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 01-23-2000 10:59 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Dark Angel,
Dark thoughts, good poem.
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5 posted 01-23-2000 11:05 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

DarkAngel-
This is so lovely.
~Spirits~ return on the wind
to touch our hearts again.
Absolutely it must have been
the loving touch
of departed friend.
~Marge~


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hoot_owl_rn
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This one reads so smoothly...but yet is so haunting
Martie
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and you made the wind blow wildly through my hair--I could almost feel it myself--

Well done!
Denise
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8 posted 01-23-2000 03:10 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Filled with a yearning that I could feel! Well done, Dark Angel!

Denise
WhtDove
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9 posted 01-24-2000 12:40 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Wonderful DA, and hauting too!
One Who Understands
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10 posted 01-24-2000 01:02 AM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

This one really made me think.

Great job
Dark Angel
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11 posted 01-24-2000 02:46 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

I'd like to thank you all for taking the time to read this and thank you all for your lovely replies, they are always appreciated.    



 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Moonshine
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12 posted 01-24-2000 03:10 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

WOW DA,

This is so beautiful - and haunting. Well done.
Beki
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13 posted 01-24-2000 03:18 AM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

What can I say that hasn't already been said?  This is lovely and haunting, only I am not sure about the ending, seems to lose some momentum there, like maybe as was suggested above there is more to it, something missing...not sure. But it is beautiful all the same.  
 
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