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0 posted 2000-01-22 06:32 PM



Hands held together
easy and free
until one day
you took yours from me

When our hands
came apart
that was when
you broke my heart

Now my hand is empty
and my life is too
my hand misses your hand
and my heart misses you.
-SEA-


*This was wrote a long time ago,for my best friend.*

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Dark Angel
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1 posted 2000-01-22 06:38 PM


This is very lovely SEA!  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Anne
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2 posted 2000-01-22 06:42 PM


One hand ripped from the grasp of another--what a fitting and poignant depiction of loss!  The simplicity and brevity of your lines work very well for this poem, implying more than they could ever say on the surface.  Very moving!
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3 posted 2000-01-22 06:42 PM


Thanks Dark Angel..... I miss my friend every day. -SEA
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4 posted 2000-01-22 08:33 PM


This is so sad  

Denise

Mike
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5 posted 2000-01-22 08:37 PM


Enjoyed the poem SEA, sorry about the friend,
but your poem shows a lot can be said with few words if they are the right ones.

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6 posted 2000-01-22 09:51 PM


Lovely  
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7 posted 2000-01-22 11:57 PM


BEAUTIFUL!!

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8 posted 2000-01-23 12:01 PM


Such tender expression!  Lovely writing.
Sherry

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9 posted 2000-01-23 12:12 PM


beautiful writings..I like reading your poetry a lot.
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10 posted 2000-01-23 12:41 PM


Denise,Mike,Hoot,Paul,Sherry,and freeverse......Thank you all so much for your kind praise!   -SEA
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11 posted 2000-01-23 02:20 AM


this is beautiful, unfortunately it is sad that things ended that way.
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