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Twilight

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Meadowmuse
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Twilight



This ache 'neath my breastbone is ancient and ill
From endless betrayals that sicken and kill
My wretched soul's dying, my mind's taking leave
No dreaming, for there are no dreams to achieve

This haunted heart's hollow, yet black sorrow~full
These empty eyed horrors have taken their toll
My breath, nearly done now, comes quiet and weak
Why could I not call to you, why could I not speak?

Why couldn't the thought of your touch fill my loss?
Your guiding hands knowing each bridge I must cross
Your sandlewood eyes, your earthenmusk scent
My lips can but taste our sweet love that's been spent

And as I lie waiting, life's respite draws nigh
My fists limp beside me, no tears fill my eye
Your lingering fragrance still clutched in my chest
My last breath is you, love ... and finally I rest

Dear LadyClaire




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Meadow,
Very dramatic, but well done and I enjoyed the read. Sy
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Excellent and an enjoyable read, as always, Claire!

Denise
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Sandlewood eyes, earthernmusk sent--I love the way you put words together and the feeling you create.
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Excellent effort.  Easy to tell the effort that went into your poem.  Enjoyed the read.
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This was very good!!!!  Loved the word choices!!

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 Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved."
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Sy, Denise, Martie, Mike, Justbleu...Thank you all for reading. Yes, it was a bit  more histrionic than I normally write but every now and again the drama insinuates into my work, and I generally allow my muse free reign.  

Claire
Anne
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Sparks my imagination!  Well done as always!
hoot_owl_rn
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Nicely written as always  
JOY 14
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I too, loved your word choices!  Very creative and dramatic!

 JOY

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Claire, this is beautiful.  The flow of the words just roll off the tongue.  Very well written.  
 
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